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by robin35
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Anonymousover 9 years agoStilted.
Wooden. I don't think I've ever read a more uptight sex story. Use contractions, please, please, please use contractions.
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoGood first try
There were a LOT of typos. Work on description rather than describing actions in order of occurrence. Do it in Word or something and it will find the typos for you.
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoOrgasms
I know stories exaggerate the ease of orgasms, but this chick cums from giving oral, being kissed, and being hugged. geezus
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