All Comments on 'Bacchus'

Dark, light, sad, funny, witty, and, most of all -- deep. There is an abundance of psychology present in this story.

If I could rate higher than 5/5, I would.

Your stories are quickly becoming some of my favorites on this site or any other and they seem to be getting better with each new installment.

Congratulations, you delayed my sleep for 3 hours because of this gem of a story. Bravo

Absolutely brilliant!!!!!

This should be sold to Hollywood as a movie. What a fantastic story! Bravo, Bravo!

Thank you for sharing your story with us. Keep writing!!!!

You have written a very good read. The situations were well written and well paced. Possibly one of the best reads I have read recently. Please keep it up.

I agree with the comment about it being a Hollywood movie. Better plot than most nowadays. All, if not most of the sex scenes would probably get dumped but the core of it was great.

Highly enjoyable read. I do think an opportunity was missed though with Angelina and Dale. 'Love is inclusive' seems to only apply when it's a bunch of females and one male. Even if, sexually, they never went any further, the reaction reminds me a bit of the 'open marriage' from One Who Understands.

Looking forward to see what you come up with next. You are a very talented writer...both imaginative and entertaining...thanks!!!

You show that beauty comes in all shapes, colors and sizes. Kudos

That was a diamond in the rough. Please seek more formal publication of this beautiful tale of compassion and love. Please. More people in the world need to be exposed to it.

-SEA

There's a lot of entertaining (and arousing) reads around these parts. But most of them are simply that. Entertaining.

You sir... Made me cry. And laugh. And daaaaw. And yell out loud at my phone at 4AM before tossing it on the floor and trying to fall asleep, fuming mad at the lot life gave Bron.

A few edits (I think Bron's name briefly changed once or twice), maybe some pacing work, and this baby would shine. It was deep, and touching. An excellent telling of a pursuit for happiness (with some sexy sprinkles).

One of the best writers

Hooked from start to end, excellent writing, appropriate levels of hot sex. Winning formula!

deceptive title. excellent writing. couldnt stop till i finished the long story!

The world-building was so great but the characters were so dull, flat, and un-captivating I had to stop at page 7. I really thought this was going to be good and Bron was a good character, but all Angelina seemed to do was cry, party, and be stupid. I found it unbelievable the father was okay with her being "In love with him", the love was not beleivable because he was getting close with other women meanwhile she was encouraging it.

The way you introduced the friends in paragraphs was so forced feeling, I would have preferred they come into the story at some point because they are necessary and developed characters. The party scene was the tipping point, the writing as well as the dialogue became so flat and the scene was so cringy I gave up. I feel like it started as a five star story and just descended until I was forcing myself to read it merely because it started so strong. As it got worse and worse I finally stopped. It really was an amazing concept, I just would have loved deeper more realistic characters, not as forced/rushed bonded relationships, and more/better character development.

Possibly the best and most engaging prose I have seen on Lit. Very enjoyable, worthy of Heinline or Sturgeon. The rumpy-pumpy was well encapsulated so it did not detract from the solid story line. Well done!

why take the lead character and turn him into an invalid with no memory? Have the love of his life marry someone else? and leave us all in limbo?

btw: the continuing problem with the names was way more than annoying.

This was a great read. I thoroughly enjoyed it!

This was a really well done story. I honestly was surprised at Angelina's reason for leaving Bron and ending up marrying someone else. To me, it portrayed her as a silly girl who refused to see the truth. She has absolutely no problem with all of her friends screwing her 'love' every time she turns around, but goes mental when he saves one and isn't mature enough to handle seeing him in the hospital. That tells me Bron had a narrow escape.

Out of all the women I'm glad he ended up with Bailey as she seemed to be the most mature out of all of them. However they all seem to have a 'share and share alike' policy so he doesn't need miss out on anything.

I'm very much enjoying your writing and look forward to reading more from you.

I wish Angelina hadn't turned out to be such a bitch. After 20+ chapters waiting for them to finally be together, it was jarring and disappointing to have her character change. Even though I really like Bailey too, it kind of leaves a sour taste in my mouth, rather than satisfaction. The entire ending was kind of bittersweet. He had to die to be able to integrate into their society? He still couldn't live more than a day at a time? It's realistic and I understand your choice but I love a happily ever after so much more than a happily for now.

Either way, a very well developed world. I'll look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

It has all the components of a great story!

I'd have enjoyed this story more if BurntRedstone wasn't so obviously manipulating the plot. Plot should be the inevitable outcome of prior plot and character. It is a disappointment if it is patently a contrivance of the author.

I thoroughly enjoyed this, as I have with several of your other stories. The only let down for me, as I'm sure it was for other readers, was how Angelina seemed to do a complete turn around emotionally. I know it seems a bit naive and silly to have expected things to turn out well for Bron and all the girls, but it was still a disappointment. Perhaps I am being too critical of a story that was otherwise a fantastic read. Keep up the good work, your writing is captivating and greatly appreciated by those whom you share it with.

my primary source for reading material.

I am a voracious reader, and have been reading Lit stories since it's infancy, but it's only been the last year or so it has become my main source for reading.

A few days ago, I finished a long submission by another author; it was a moving and powerful tale, well constructed and executed. It was also the last of the unread stories from the author.

Atypically, I didn't have another author or title 'lined up' to read. I was at loose ends; emotionally impacted by the story I had just finished, and wondering if anything I read, for a long time, would match up to what I had just finished.

'Redstone was on a list of authors I had compiled, in a genre new to me: NonHuman. It's only been the last 30 days I have intentionally chose titles in this section.

As I perused BurntRedstone's list of submissions, nothing jumped out at me. None of the titles grabbed my attention and the descriptions fell short of inspiring interest. Relunctantly, I continued searching. I saw a single word title, Bacchus. "What the heck," I thought, "I'll give it a shot."

That was the moment my life changed; that very moment. I didn't know it, at the time. It would be hours later, and many pages into the world of Bron, Angelina, Bacchus and Walla before I fully realized the impact of my decision to '...give it a shot.'

My sincerest thanks and appreciation to you, 'Redstone, for sharing Bron, and for the hard work it took to bring him to life. His quiet power and wisdom will be with me for the rest of my days.

Thank you, thank you, thank you.

My best wishes and deepest regard,

GeoD

PS

I honestly do not recall the title, author or substance of the 'moving and powerful tale' I read just prior to Bacchus.

I very much enjoyed the character development in this story, which I felt had a good pace, without skimping on detail.

The ending is... tough to deal with. I'm an incurable romantic, so the twist is hard for me to deal with. Have to respect the writers autonomy though, not everyone is so tied to clichés!

Aside from that, 5 stars, despite the fact that I felt the ending was rushed uni as though there was a deadline. I though it was closed out pretty well though, and will definitely read more from this talented writer.

Judge

This story has so much to it, action, passion, romance, heartbreak, war, peace, politics and love itself. This is something worthy of being a book. 10/10, am recomending to all of my interested friends.

I don't like being played by an author. Shame on you. You fucking stuck Angelina in my face like a carrot on a string. I fucking empathized with bron's love WHY THE FUCK WOULD I WANT TO READ THAT HEART BREAK? How fuckng weak. You made Angelina as dumb as fucking pile of bricks at the end. Inconsistent. shes smart and disciplined enough to make these political maneuvers, but assanine, belligerent, and stupid enough to leave bron because the guy saved a chick? A FRIEND? Fuck that! Fuck you! What the fuck. No. shame on you. You made this story a pile of shit after the bomb. Pathetic. Rewrite it bitch. He never even got over Angelina, he still gets heartbroken when he hears her name on the last fucking page? They never had sex! FUCK YOU! We read this whole fucking story so we could have Angelina and brown fuck. It's what we wanted, but you just turn around and give us the finger by basically having him fuck almost everyone else and then her have children and a future we hoped bron would have? The fuck? Poor treatment to your readers. Do you even give a fuck about us? I read this shit all day for this much of a pathetic ending. swear to god, I'll haunt you to the fucking grave for the shit you pulled with this ending. Fuck this ending.

You had me dead to rights for 25 long pages. LOVED every moment. Then you turned your back on everything you had written and pulled a "twist" on us for whatever petty reason that amused you. To build us up for so long, to build the characters to a crescendo like that, to have Bron and Angelina go through SO much and then just thoughtlessly and carelessly toss it all aside for your own amusemtnt has ripped all trust that all GOOD authors engender with their readers. I loved "An angel for Bishop". I saw this had high marks so gave it a chance. I will not be reading any more of your stories as this one has left me too distrutful of you. Profanities aren't needed, but I do agree with the anger and sentiments of the gentleman above. I wasted 2 days on this piece of garbage. You authors always say you read through thoughtful criticmsms. PLEASE consider this and edit this story and give it the pending it deserves.

Fuck all of the long winded negative assholes. I enjoyed the hell out of your writing. It was so much more enjoyable reading than all of the stories that are solid sex.

I have been binge reading a lot of your content and this story especially had so much emotion and was so well written, it actually amazes me a bit. Now for most, the elephant in the room is that twist at the end. I kinda think it makes a little sense considering the image of the character I built in my head. Did I see it coming, not at all, but does it make sense to me, ya Kinda. Overall though, out standing book, wish it had a hard cover even, its so good I would love to put it on a shelf an pick it up it at leisure.

What a grand story! Quite recently I stumbled across your work when I started reading the "Ed" stories (One Who Understands, The Most Valuable Gift), which I think are a great introduction to your work. Then on I went to the "Jack" story line, which introduced me to your fantastic ability to delve into SciFi/Fantasy. The Shepherd series was next and I find myself re-reading those while I wait for your next installment.

Yesterday was my birthday and I started the day by beginning to read this work. After the first page I hit the dropdown to see how long the story was. Twenty-nine pages! Happy Birthday to me, indeed!

This story has all the ingredients, mystery, suspense, action, romance and of course sex, without any of them being over done. And the ending! All the various sub plots tied up neatly, with happiness for everyone involved.

Your best work yet, thanks for taking me far away on such a grand adventure!

I was disappointed as well that Angelina and Bron couldn't make it work. But I recognize that life does not always work out the way you want. Anything else is childish fantasy. Think of it this way, he deserved her love but she didn't deserve his. Also sometimes if you are with someone and their life is constant drama and strife you tend to distance yourself from them if you want anything approaching a normal life.

“”

While he was in Garroon he didn't plan to see Angelina as she had made her choice very clear and it was still painful to him.

“”

...I should have been taking notes way earlier but got so wrapped up in the story that I blew it off ;)

...I can't believe Angelina did that!! Not even a fucking WORD to Bron!! What kind of worthless fuck actually DOES something like that to someone?! Hell, would have been more fun if Bron had snapped his neck, dropped him in a trashcan and found the nearest trash incinerator to get rid of the body! ...well, it would have felt good for a few hours anyway, feeding the spite dagger, till he cooled down anyway. The only thing I can come up with is that she still loves Bron, married this guy to have children, knowing that he was fast dying of a terminal disease, lol. ...but who knows if Bron would have moved on by then?

I can't believe how much Bron gets the shit beat out of him! ROFL!! School has been the only break! (Pardon pun!;)

...I guess Laura feels bad for putting Bron in a bad spot and is to ashamed to see him. ...I kinda like her!

“”

What?" Bron wasn't sure he'd heard her correctly as what she'd said made no sense.

"The night of the explosion... you left me." She was trembling now.

Bron looked at her, unable to defend himself as he had no memory of the event.

"I don't understand. I left you in the building?"

"NO! You got us to safety THEN YOU WENT BACK FOR LAURA!" she screamed.

“”

Waitaminute here!! Let me see if I've got this right… this psychotic bitch is copping out on his ass because he went back in to save a friend?! ...what, because she almost lost him to the explosion?! So he should have just left his friend to die, worse, knowing she died and he was responsible for her not being able to escape! Screw her! He’s better off!

“”

He suddenly recalled what he'd told Bailley. A part of his heart would always love Angelina and that part was now telling him he had to let her have this.

She needed the lie. As much as she needed children she needed to believe that he'd left her.

She needed it to heal. To move on with her life. To enjoy her new life with her husband and children without reservation.

A wave of pain washed over his soul. Then he sat upright and looked at the crying woman.

"Yes. I did."

“”

OH HELL NO!! FUCK THAT!! Let her off the hook for twisting the knife in his heart? Let her tell herself a lie and live that lie just so she can FEEL GOOD ABOUT HERSELF?! Fuck that and fuck her!

“”

For the first time in his life he wished for the ability to cry.

“”

...that's funny because he was crying with Angelina's dad not too long ago!

...Bailley is the catch of the day though! Love the island retreat! The poor bastard keeps losing his memory, its like a bad soap opera, ROFL! ...and I think a number of TV producers and writers are reading here on literotica, lol! Cause either that or you got ideas from some TV shows, heh. I'll have to look at some of the dates.

The bomb in the building for example, explosion then implosion to a block of stuff! That was in….umm… Agent of Shield I think? With the female star and Tony Starks dads Butler? (That's a mouthful!!) ...and what was that other one, lemme think...OH!!!! NOW I remember! The pendant necklace! Not exactly the same but pretty close generally speaking; Blacklist!! I don't recall the name of the book/information that he was using for leverage but it was very similar in the information's ability, lol.

Pretty good ending for the story, its always hard to wrap up a story and end things where it doesn't leave you feeling wanting or hanging out there! Ironically I wasn't even looking for this kind of story, I just stumbled on it then couldn't hardly put it down!

The story was a blast to read Angelina's actions were the only thing that left a bad taste in my mouth, just seemed so out of character for her and the story. Hell, he should drop by and pay her a visit… bang the daylights out of her and ruin her for other men, heh ;) (once you go blue…;)

Thanks for writing!!

I'm glad of the way the story was told because it deserves more than the five stars available. The thing with Angelina though, the thought process of an idiot and prior to the bomb she didn't seem a character with low intelligence or EQ. Also, why does Bron feel jealous? He's been having tonnes of sex with many partners (some who he even loved as much as Angelina). Why be upset because she had just one? They could have been polyamorus if the guy wasn't competitive.

I really loved this story. It has everything - especially the surprise ending. Like a lot of others, I wasn't thrilled with Angelina's decisions. But, that's life, I guess. Also, Bron's return was a relief. I thought this story was going for tragic ending.

There are a few errors though. A few times, Bron became Joe and someone else I don't remember the name now.

I wonder why the story wasn't titled "Bron". It was all about him and just a little about "Bacchus". But still worth 5 stars. Thanks for the great story.

Really great story. Recommend it to any and all.

Who is Joe on page 12?

Sasha's whole mom bit seemed sort of short... Like there wasn't enough time to like her hate her like her... She just seemed to bounce between what you wanted her to be too quickly for my taste...

And I'm disappointed IN Angelina... Didn't she know Bron enough to know the sacrificing kind of person he was... She SHOULD have known he did what he did because it's who he is, not because of feelings for Laura...

In a way though, she DID know why he did it... She just couldn't accept that because it would mean it WAS her who did the abandoning... He (potentially) sacrificed himself (if the bomb would have blown before he got clear at all) for someone ELSE... She sacrificed their love... For herself.

And it's kind of too bad Gregory hasn't included actual fertility with humans as part of that override... A way of ensuring a spread of this Genie... Especially if the children LOOKED human (all the easier to have them blend in and further disrupt civilizations)...

Would have been funny to find out he was suddenly making these women pregnant when initial testing said it was impossible...

Plus... That would have added another almost horrific level of grief to Angelina... When she found out she could have had a family AND him... Maybe I'm just mean thinking she might have deserved that...

Though you could second story that... Especially if Dale turns out to NOT be such a good guy as he grows into their marriage (what with her lingering feelings for another man no matter what she might SAY)... and her having to earn back the love and support of her friends (who currently aren't likely to Friend Request her) after he leaves her out of the blue, maybe taking their kids, and disappearing off-planet... And her having to deal with being at best a secondary love instead of a primary love having thrown that position away...

Yep, I'm just mean... I find it hard to like someone who throws away love...

But regardless, exceptional story... Had me feeling like crying a few times...

great character development. Wonderful drama. Please write more!!

Me. But I am green to blue and my scales are a little larger. I am bigger but I think he may be smarter. I don't have as many loves as he does but they have always remained true. I used to live on Easter Island, but the dumb statues don't really look that much like me. I now live in Micronesia, but I don't tell anybody (except my wives) where I am. I am good at standing still for long periods of time and everybody thinks I am vegitation if they happen into my inner island keep. So, if you will quit telling people lies about my cousin, I will grant you the interview you keep begging me for. Now be good for a change and keep your damned mouth shut. Lyn

I thought my favorite one was about Ben but > you got into this one pretty deep. I had no idea what I was getting myself into when I started Bacchus! I dunno what to say...you had my attention thru several packs of cigarettes and a good part of a fifth of good whiskey. Talk about a flight of imagination! That was fun....Thanks again > Scotty /slowrdr@aol.com

That was a really great story. I hope you write more in this genre. There are several times that you use Ben when you meant Bron.

I kept getting turned off of this story on the basis of the Genies and the part that talks about the sex club genies being killed/raped. Turned my stomach for months. Finally, after months of saying I wouldn't read it, I started reading it again, and was able to get past that scene and discovered what a wonderful story you truly wrote with this. Yes, many of your stories, involve the polyamorous theme. But you do it in a way that is unique most times. I love your writing style, it provides great entertainment both sexually and with the action. I will say I too was upset with what happened between Bron and Angelina, but if we're honest with ourselves that circumstance happens in the real world more often than it doesn't. I mean in the US alone spouses of military members used/still send them Dear John/Jane letters just because they were deployed and the spouse went seeking fulfillment somewhere else. It happens, so no surprise that an author would attempt to capture that. It sucks, but it is a fact of life.

Thank you BR for your constant stories, entertainment, and just the emotion you put into each of your characters.

-J

Bravo!

Thank you. I get started reading and can't quit till I finish the complete story.

I generally leave comments as anon but this story forces me to log in so that it won't be seen as anything but my true thoughts. I found this story just by doing some random searching on the site and after reading a small bit, I was entertained. After reading about half, I was hooked. After it finished, I was sated.

I know that phrases such as 'work as a full time author' or such is said in so many comment sections and it can become a catch phrase as a way to say good job. However, when I say this about this story, I am not using hyperbole. This had the quality of being a printed book that I might find at a book store.

***SPOILERS***

I was particularly pleased that the romance that had been building from the beginning cratered and Bron wound up with the shy girl. Also that Bailley didn't have her history written out but instead left the cause of her scars to simple clues.

I loved this story it was great even though the ending was not what I was hoping for. The only thing I would have liked to see was during the cell scene that Bron got his memory back about the club explosion and basically let Angelina have it, because he did not leave her she left him. I think She deserves to live with that. All he did was save a friend, that he has so precious few of, and that she could not see that. This is just me. But no matter what the story was excellent.

I second Ambivalence's post as well it is what I was trying to convey.

Your story is truly magnificent you truly inspire the good in me and taught me a valuable lesson to not be bitter in lyf.Thank you

The one thing I don't like about this story is that it's erotica. I have no personal problems against erotica, but I have very sexually conservative family members and friends, and pretend to be the same, so I can't share this story with anybody. I can't think of a better way to say this so please don't mistake it for an insult, it's just a really badly worded compliment: it could be a relatively simple matter to make this story T-rated and spread it around. Sexy discretion shots (avoid directly showing sex) and wording changes in a few places, it becomes obvious enough to keep the spirit of the events while lowering the rating to what could be publicly enjoyed and suggested to friends who aren't into erotica. I usually don't suggest reading material to others, but this is something that I would gleefully spread around if it wasn't so out-of-character for my social persona.

Probably my main gripe is that Laura just drops out of the story. We don't learn why she never went back to Bron or even if he remembers their time together before his coma. Despite her amazing character arc, there is no payoff on her relatioship with Bron.

Also I found the ending to be a bit depressing. Maybe it's just my deep rooted fear of memory loss, but I didn't care for how Bron ended up, and we'll never know if he ever got all his memories back.

Angelina leaving Bron, if it had to happen, should have been much more gradual. Have them slowly drifting apart, instead of giving me whip-lash.

Upon finishing, I was left with an empty feeling, like I wasn't actually finished. The story is already pretty long, but I think an extra chapter or two would have been helpful in smoothing out some of the problems.

This needs to be a film.

This is definitely one of the best I've read on this site. Some parts felt like it was rushed such as the part of Sasha and Bron on The Hammer. Felt like like it was over in a page. Loved how you made Angeline seem so realistic. A genius is not a genius when it comes to emotions. She's said to be smart but life's not perfect.

I thoroughly enjoyed this. Bron was a great character!!! I love Sci fi and erotica, you blended them together very well, and managed to combine various forms of erotica! Bravo!

thank you for this intriguing and mesmerizing tale

Excellent story.... however, Bron and Angelina not coming together was such a buzzkill! They sacrificed so much for their love and it totally was just ended in one paragraph. No drifting apart or realizing that they didn't love eachother like they thought they did... just a boom and gone. Great story until the ending killed it.

We all know that Angelina was the main love interest here regardless of what you intended. Having her ending be this way just sucked. I figured I would give this a shot after enjoying the beginning of the Ed and Ben stories and then I got to this after reading the ending for Ed and (SPOIILER:) what happens with Margaux and Ben. Seriously man I love your work with character development, scenery, and general plot flow. But the heartache endings keep pissing me off. I enjoy reading the hurt in the beginning of the stories as this gets me emotionally invested, and even some tumultuous ground in the middle if it serves the plot or character growth, but when you end with pain I get this feeling that I would have been better off not reading any of it to begin with.

Nevertheless, I do thoroughly enjoy your writing style above all others on this site. Thank you for the reads and hope to find one that stands out above the rest for me.

Normally I would encourage an author to write more but their story, but this tale of Bron is so wonderfully self-contained and satisfying. Thank you for your writing.

The end seemed rushed and muddled. I certainly do not understand the reason Angelina left, and Bailey's return. I didn't feel it. What kind of relationship does he have with these women? He loves and adopted a child with Sasha, he declares his love for Bailey, and she him. He bangs the other girls occasionally, and Angelina, who loved him so much, leaves him without a word. Very unsatisfying and jumbled ending

great story, top notch sci-fi although I have to agree with the few comments I've read that say the ending is a bit off. It's weirdly abrupt to read 26 pages of Angelina being the primary love interest for it to suddenly disappear. It was also far more jarring and out of place than how Ben was handled. It felt very forced, like it couldn't be a happily ever after so shit happens for tenuous reasons.

Still gave it a 5 because the story is fantastic, just a thought for the future

You crafted an excellent story. Characters were likeable and lots of action both sheets and booms.

However, you lost your way with the club explosion. The Angelita betrayal was poorly done, Lauren dropping out was abrupt, the gang splitting also seemed out of character considering how tight you portrayed them. Honestly felt like you needed to wrap the story up and pushed through to an ending.

That being said you had a great concept and an engaging protagonist. Your world is wonderfully designed. I enjoyed the read despite my dissatisfaction with the ending.

This is definitely my least favorite story that BurntRedstone has written. It's three times better then most of the slop you'd find on this site. My biggest grievances is with the amnesia thing and Bron's muddled romances. I effing hate memory loss in stories, it annoys the hell out of me, plus it's not even clear how much he regains by the end of the story. Some of the relationships he has confuse me. I grasp the Angelina and Bailey situations with him. Sasha confuses me because they confess to be in love, but act like casual fuck-buddies most of the time, and never mention it again after the first time they admit it. Also Asami and Lauren seem to have reasons to love Bron, but we never see anything like that. I'll throw in Rhonda because she was there at the end.

Also this story just doesn't have the reread-ability I find in BurntRedstones other works, like The Most Valuable Gift or the Ben Shepherd story arcs. I find those much more enjoyable then Jack's saga or this

Burntredstone does a nice job of developing his characters. This story is no exception. The thing that is offputting is his tendency to slip in political statements by disparaging people because of the region they are from or their beliefs. Generalizations only serve to alienate. It may be surprising, but Liberals are not always open-mind and contrary to popular opinion; Conservatives are not all closed minded racists and whatever list of phobes one wishes to add.

Case in point, yours truly is religious and conservative but yet appreciates stories on Literotica. Go figure. I think women of all races are beautiful, although I have an affinity for red-heads and asians. My wife of 30+ years, the only woman I had sexual relations with, is neither a redhead or asian. Love has a way of working past preconceived notions.

So please, BurntRedStone, continue to write your beautiful stories, but try to resist the temptation to denigrate those who may not line up with your political views. As you try to convey in your stories, love conquers all. Negative caricatures and applying labels on one group or another dismantles the any bridges that can be built between the two.

Time to step off my soapbox. :-)

Enjoyed the story...read it for a break from following another of your continuing adventures...I love a good story and probably have a very different take on your outline and ending for this story...I thought it was excellent. again, Thank you for the time and effort you put into you stories. I´ll now go back to your other big guy and finish that story.

As someone who needs to escape from life sometimes these short stories with a bit of excitement are the perfect thing. It is amazing the feeling of loss when the story is over. Truly thank you for writing these.

Angelina should have had to face and accept her betrayal instead of being allowed to lie to herself about it...just my opinion otherwise loved the story as I love all your works.

Otherwise, they'd be their willing partners for the night. The ladies had been terrified but saw they had no other choice.

WTF Burnt?

I ubderstand why it happened. But dude that ruined the entire story for me. After all the waiting did and it was for not. I'm legit upset. I don't get upset at this shit. Good writing, she should have realized her mistake and left that other guy

Thank you for a trip to the stars and to the depths. of human frailty. Again as always more please.

First off thank you for a wonderful story. I really enjoyed how Bron just by his unconditional caring made people better versions of themselves. There were just two things I thought didn't quite fit the story.

The night club scene where he has three women to pleasure. Seemed out of character for our hero. Secondly was Angela, the explanation didn't seem justified. If she had said she couldn't take him constantly getting hurt or she wanted children, or any other reason I don't know it just seemed like a weak reason for a major plot line.

Still I gave it 5 stars. Love your work.

An absolute gem of a story. I loved every part of it, every plot twist and nuance. The most pleasant surprise was the last part. The journey of Bron from a being with conditioning to absolute free will. That you even attempted that and didn't end the story before is a serious reflection on the breadth of your artistic vision. That you achieved it so gracefully was the icing on the cake. There were so many things you handled so beautifully.

I love it that the story is not pretty and made up. I love your theme of - Life isn't fair and the best you can do is to live each day to the full with hope. And I love how you stick to that theme to the last. The fact that love and loyalties change and people who were so important once just fade away while some hopefully remain is what this makes a beautiful story. And there are plenty of nuances. You have the selfish actions of Sasha's mother in ignoring her children when they were small and then when her empire was threatened she once again dragged her daughter to danger. The calm and ease with which Asami's sister removes her from her life. A close friend Stephie settling into a new life and just losing touch. All this is what adds colour and depth to the story. The way Bron fails and just has an orgy for pleasure and then experiences the guilt and realises how free will is like a rudderless car without the inner compass of ethics was amazingly executed. It was an amazing contrast to the structured 'cannot do wrong' life Bron had with conditioning. Again as a metaphor that is exactly the kind of realisation all of us go through when we first step out of the shadows of our guardians and learn to take responsibilities for our actions.

And I haven't even touched the big twist. In my opinion your handling of the Bron Angie affair was exceptional. I get it would have been easier to make this an ...and they loved happily ever after, affair. But boy am I glad you refrained from that. I love it how there is no real reason why Angie walked away and how she still subconsciously asked Bron to take the blame to let her move on with her life. Love is fragile. There are a thousand tests that can break it. Tragedies, hardships, suspicions - every relation goes through those tests and it is those that survive that emerge strongest and remain with us for life. Sure that does mean some very beautiful potential relationships are lost but that is life. Beauty isn't the only metric. Tenacity and longevity are equally important. I was reading some of the comments on the site and people were surprised that Angie and Bron didn't make it through after so much build up and anticipation. Sure when one first comes across that in the story it is unexpected. But that is the beauty of it. It is as unexpected for the reader as it was for the character Bron. But aside from that it was not surprising the relation didn't survive. Considering how it went through such strain. The number of times Bron and Angie were separated by fate in dangerous circumstances, I personally think that moment Bron ran off to save Laura leaving Angie already traumatised by the danger worried sick and in terror for his safety for the umpteenth time was perfect to explain the breaking point of their relationship. It is not hard to see how denying public acceptance of their relationship for an elongated time through such profound events will test the relationship to the breaking point. The biggest hindrance to a relationship is the participant's fear of losing the relationship and if unchecked insecurity of loss can destroy all that is good in our life.

I could go on but I think I will stop here. And I will say one more thing. The first story I read written by you was Satyr Play and I came across because it was in the Literotica all time top read or most rated lists, I don't recall which. I loved the story but while that was deliciously fantastical, this is profoundly deep and a real pleasure. I have yet to read your other works but that is a good thing for me. In anticipation of the same.

Thank You for your wonderful effort.

I've read just about every story you've written and so far every one has been 5 stars, this one included. I wasn't fond.of the bittersweet ending but then not every story has a happy ending for everyone, much like real life. Every one.of your stories is well written and its more than just thw sex scenes. Many other commentors.have said they would make great movies and in would agree. Keep up the writing and I'll keep reading.

I usually really like your stories, and this one was mostly well written, but you went off the rails completely at the end, absolutely negating the rest of the story. Colossal waste of time.

As a science fiction story, Bacchus just doesn’t make the cut.

You’ve written a story taking place in the far future, and people still carry cell phones? Think of the changes in telephones in just the past 30 years, and extrapolate them over 300 hundred or more. You have characters taking their cell phones out of a purse or pocket to make a recording, as though they were still using iPhones! Or the very heart of your story, in which society now has the biotechnology to create artificial human beings, as well as clones. All that, and there’s no better medical treatment for a concussion than bed rest? They don’t have any way to treat severe bruising? To treat Bron after he’s thrown into a wall, they put him in a medically-induced coma for months? As science fiction goes, it is simply not believable.

Your ending was, well, strange at best. It felt as though you’d written yourself into a corner, with the girl Bron truly loved having dumped him and you needing to do something with the character. So all of a sudden he’s in love with a different girl instead? Huh? It just didn’t work for the character you’d created. And why Bailley?You would have done better to have him wind up with the rather unpleasant Sasha, with whom he had spent far more time.

There are also some writing errors that have nothing to do with its being sci-fi. At one place you wrote “He's going to be an incredible masseuse”. Not unless he gets a sex change, he’s not— the term for a male is masseur, not masseuse. And there were other errors like that one.

You have done better work. I don’t know if this story was rushed, or if you didn’t take the time for rewrites, but this isn’t up to your usual, better-than-the-Literotica norm.

To all you assclowns that were disrespectful go read something else to the author thanks

what will come in the generations that follow. TK U MLJ LV NV

Your story was beautiful. My only gripe was how angiline treated Bron in the end. It was counter to her personality from the rest of the story that she ended up a complete bitch. So anyway it was your story so it should be how you want but just know it made me cry for how she treated him.

Brilliantly written, full of surprises, Bron's evolution (and sudden devolution), his love, his pain and sorrow, his broken heart, the twists, trials, and tests. The Greg Taggart twist was especially brutal, as was Angelina's leaving.

I believe I understand your plot twist and Bron's loss of Angelina. It broke my heart, and she was mistaken in her thinking, but it was a plot twist, nonetheless. That part needs more development but it was a noble effort.

In the end, Bron's gentle nature was the clear winner. Thank you for a wonderful story.

I absolutely love your story if I had it as a book I would read it again and again. Yes the sexy parts were nice but I loved it as a story. You did an amazing job.

You have some interesting underlying ideas, but overall, Bacchus is underdeveloped, cloying and confusing. With a few emendations — more attention to plot details, the overall story arc and character development — this could be an exemplary story.

Loves the character development. I also enjoyed the loss of his first love. That paying just rang so true.

What a beautiful story. This one finally made me sign up because I just kept brooding about it. I loved Bron, I loved the way you developed the story, although it was a little confusing at times and the emotions you put into this. I have a love-hate relationship with how this story ended. It broke my heart when Angelina left. I sincerely hoped they would end up together, but once she got pregnant, I knew it wouldn't happen. I was so sorry for Bron. To be honest, I actually cried (just a little - okay, for an hour or so..). I understand Bron and Bailley fit better with each other and that you needed a plot twist, but at the same time I hope ending of your next story that I will read, (most definitely!) will be happier. Thank you so much and sorry if I somehow managed to mutilate English language, not a native speaker. :)

Really enjoyed this one up until the last few pages. The break with Angelina was powerful but I felt like it came out of nowhere and needed a bit more build up. Same with a lot of the characters actually. It's not how they ended that was off it was how they got there, mainly because we didn't really see/feel it. That being said those last few pages cannot diminish what was a fantastic ride and I really liked this one despite it falling short at the end.

I'm not gonna lie my humble ✨sun-burnt star stone of the earth🌞, I stayed up for 12 hours reading this 'all together' wonder. (Due to severe insomnia as well). Besides the point, the literary context you grappled with mixed imperfectly well with the recipe for your 'tragic hero' dish. Shit most of these words I had to search for simultaneously while reading to discover their meanings. More so to the point of this minor critique is that this literature is by far one of the most promisingly edge-bringer stories I have read in all of my years of reading erotica fiction. I, thoroughly, enjoyed the 'not every ending is sunshine and rainbows' perspective brought into play, as well as a couple of major principles of life in general. I do have to agree, however, with most (75%) of the commentors' blatant outcries to the forced separation of our girl Angelina and Bron. Her opting him out of her life plays a crucial and taxing criple on the stories initial, if albeit, crunched ending. It did feel like you guillotining some brightly glowing scenes that were meant to spiral off into about a chapter or two's time period, but hey, it's just a story, not a proposal to the President. And, as an artist myself, I can't knock you for that, because part of being a creator in the arts' field (whether liberal or visual) comes with the natural folly of being prone to unware mistakes and ignorance. And there's never a hot damn thing wrong about that, because hey, you can always speak about it in a sequel to the prequel if wish to do so. You're human, and although Bron isn't, you're both aware that shit is bound to fly and splatter the ceiling. Aside from some of the snide, rude, and bigoted asssmackers (not all of them, but you've seen them to know which ones I'm mentioning) that left you with there tasteful two cents, you've done a remarkable job in creating an immersive world that was innovative, critical, perpetually strong-minded, and a wondrous sea of hope and faith that comes with pain and consequence. Stay strong my man. Although this is the first of your stories that I have read from your archives, I know that you will blow more minds in the future. And it doesn't have to end in bittersweet defeat for the characters of the readers. But uuuhhhh- confidentially- I already knew that once you introduced Bailley into the Edvard Monet picture, the primary love interest would be traded in exchange for the bulletin point on the triangle's angel. So no harm done here. Freakin Premonition Capricorn here and shit....ANYWAYS!! I hope in desperation that you continue through this battlefield of life in general, in regards to the Literotica zone as well. Maybe the next character is a plus size African American female with a luscious Afro, pining for a Bron herself. Nah, that's just my vivid imagination go wild...again.

Smooches and deuces,

Miss SinJaye

P.S.: Thank you!!💗

so much humanity in non-human

and if there is a description on an ideal "male" that was it :)

It’s obviously a really good story if I read it all the way to the end but it really fizzled out for me. The character flip with Angelina didn’t make any sense to me and the way Laura’s arc ended was confusing as well. Some really mixed feelings on this one.

I loved the story. I truly did, regardless of the ending. I understand matching Br0n up with Bailey, and I love her, too. However, I really wanted to believe in the love between Br0n and Angelina. I think it would have been a little bit easier if, early in the story (maybe shortly after the time when Br0n had whispered something to Bailey that was able to put her at ease), you had given us Bailey's backstory. We never found out why she was so scared of men. We only got a hint of it at the end with her work at the women's shelter. Even then, that doesn't give us a true sense of her pain, nor any real information about her past.

If there had been some competition inside my own head between Angelina and Bailey (even if that competition didn't exist between the characters), I wouldn't have felt so much like /my/ world had ended, even if Br0n felt like /his/ had. I really did like the way Bailey and Br0n interacted throughout the story, but I never got the feeling that there was any "I would lay down my life for you" type of love between the two of them (yeah, I know Br0n would lay down his life for all of his friends, but I'm talking about that absolute love of a lifelong partner that it felt like existed between him and Angelina).

I don't know if I'm really making any sense, and I'm not sure if you'll ever even see this, but maybe it will help you or some other random author who understands what I'm shooting at make better plot decisions in the future. I'm really not suggesting that the ending change, just that you should be more empathetic to your readers, even if you have to deliver a bit of tragedy. As it stands, I'm afraid I'm going to carry this pain for at least a few days.

...Yeah, I guess I'm weird like that.

Five stars doesn't do any part of this story justice.

This is a true sci-fi exploration of so many facets of love and being human, the good and the bad. Bron is an amazingly well developed character, as were all the others, and totally believable.

So glad I found this wonderful story for our current shut-in situation. Way beyond five stars. Thank you for it.

but I can't. It's much like the other one you wrote in 3 parts about the Big Guy that was a Heating and Cooling Savant. That story was much better. I think the problem here was the fact the main character is some weird experiment and then you made most of the story revolve around him and Angeline and then you just made Angeline bail on him with no REAL specific reason. It paints her in a bad light and taints the story. Sorry, but the best I could do was 3 stars on this as it wasn't bad enough for 2 stars, barely.

To be honest, there are many puzzling things that happened in this story and I kind of wish I had stopped reading it about 10 pages in so I didn't waste my time on it.

Decently good story. Our poor hero suffered thru way more than most could withstand. Beyond the physical damage he ultimately gets the shaft by his maiden in waiting, by what I thought was a very weak point. What was he supposed to do? Watch their friend die. That was hardly his style. Fortunately there was at least a bunch of hot buddies around he could fall back to.

Love your wrting, your character development. Great story.

I can't form a comment to say how brilliant your writing is.

A story about the true dangers in the world, when you are a person of integrity and morals.

Love your work please don't die and author I started reading passed away the writer of "Sofia " passed before end the story your have that same life to them you just won't more thank you

A thoroughly distasteful story conveying the very worst (and few of the best) of human characteristics. There wasn't a single character in the story (including Bron) that a person would want to emulate. After all the really good stuff you have posted, this is one story you should have removed from your listings Sorry for the negative comment on this particular story, but there was nothing in it that all your efforts could turn into a readable story.

Wow. This was an Amazingly well written story. You're writing is engrossing and I'm glad I discovered it

I really enjoy your work. This is an epic story, one which would quite at home in the 40’s and 50’s (those days of romantic SF). I read all of your stories multiple times...this will reread as well. Keep it up!!

This story sets a pretty high bar! I really enjoyed your Shepherd sage, I think this beat. it.