All Comments on 'The Mysterious Touch'

Obviously we need some background on the old man. How, when and where he acquired this power. Next our hero needs to learn and expand his awareness of the power. Some great stories can be written with this plot. I hope you continue it.

some feedback for you:

1. use an editor, it will help with spelling and word usage.

2. When you post try to post at least 2 pages at a time, you will get higher ratings. People tend to rate less here when the story is one page.

3. background on the old man.

4. Ty needs to explore the power but not be a huge dick about it.

Before I get the deluge about posting this, I have multiple college degrees. When most people read that can fix the words with their mind as they go, but it breaks the feeling on the story to do so.

I really appreciate all your feedback on my story. Thanks for taking the time to leave it. I'm brand new at this so I'll take as much advice as people are willing to give. =)