All Comments on 'When You Least Expect It Ch. 01'

Your way of speech nor your sentence structure....

A reader is not supposed to be confused from the get go.

Please speak with a few editors and look at the pages that they give you on help with points of view and writing from different perspectives.

Sadly I won't be following this story it was just painful to read. You definitely need a editor. .

I don't get the theta ignoring orders from his alpha or that being allowed.

I have to agree with the previous. This needs editing badly. Painful to read is a very accurate description.