All Comments on 'Bar Scene'

Long run on paragraphs. Your first two sentences covered 7 separate subjects.

Unreadable!

I agree with Gordo. You need help with paragraphing. Maybe with spelling and grammar. I did not read it, as it was, prima facie , unreadable.

Please get an editor and resubmit.

Sentence structure was a bit weak; however, the thought of being given to a bar full of black man makes me really wet. Xoxoxoxox Annette

If grammar and sentence structure are your biggest complaints, perhaps another site would be more to your liking and reading enjoyment. I am guessing that the author would prefer comments based on content rather than grammatical correctness. And, by the way, fun story.

If you feel a piece is worthwhile enough to upload and share, then it is also worthwhile enough to get one or more editors from Literotica to look it over and provide suggestions (they are awesome, and they work for free). To a point, content is more important than mechanics, but when mechanics/grammar interferes with the understanding of the story and the flow of interaction between characters, your grammar works against your story. Take you time and edit and your stories will improve greatly.

Always thought of how a scene like this would play out if I took my wife to a bar like this.

Don't let the negative comments get to you....

After all, it's just porn

Erin Hottttttttttt

My wife had a similar experience but with 26 black studs.

Love the story very hot wish you made it longer. You need another chapter wanting more!!!

Ya ya ya...quite the wife. The husband is even worse. You should have written that she got knocked up and had nothing but black babies for the rest of her life! LOL

I get so wet thinking about being fucked like this.

I need to make it happen

I loved your story. I love black cock . I’m a white married woman of 11 yrs . My husband and I have been to a couple swinger clubs in Vegas . That where I got hooked on black cock. My husband works off shore on ships so he is gone 30 days at a time. He knows I’m fucking Joe a black friend of ours. What my husband doesn’t know is that Joe is a black bull. I love Joe I love his dominants . He has shared me with several of his black friends in gangbangs . The best things is being talked really dirty to as he fucks me. Telling me I’m his white and slut. I love sucking his big black cock and letting drain it down my throat . Sorry honey but black men rules

just more crap.

I love the story i wish i could get fuck like that. I am 66yrs sexy black woman. But i enjoy reading about the white sluts and becoming queen of spares. I have not had a good fuck since my husband divorce me.

I never had no husband but I had kids and was used like I was married I guess. Mostly ALL my lovers been Black Mens. All my Baby Daddies been Black. My firsts was Black and even after them mostly. I remember being at bars and fooling around in there and being touched on or going out in the parking lot to smoke up or suck one of the guys I was dancing off or some even bending me over the hood of some car and doing me from behind fucking me right there in the parking lot. So crazy stuff do happen like this. I know I done some just like this. Even when a boyfriend or Lover took me with him when he was playing Spades with his friends or dominoes and we was all drinking and things would change to like them touching and kissing on me then it would start being On and OK with the Man who took me there for his cousins or friends to have me to.

I love the story, I would like to know weather she got breeded? So please write another story on Kevin & Michelle after they get home and she finds out that she was breeded. I was wet reading this.

Nice story, but could have had a little more content and I would like to see another installment of Michelle and Kevin and whether she continues to take BBC gangbangs.