All Comments on 'First Week in the University City'

This was really, REALLY bad. A few small things right from the start, then, "She sat at the other desk and set his laptop up to the WLAN..." All downhill from there.

English is obviously not the "author's" first language, but that doesn't mean a submission shouldn't be dumped on readers in this appalling shape. We are not your guinea pigs!

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"English is obviously not the "author's" first language, but that doesn't mean a submission shouldn't be dumped on readers in this appalling shape. We are not your guinea pigs!"

Indeed, English is not my first language, so I might pass my stories through some voluntary editors. But why bother them, if the "author's" stories are not worth it in the firsts place? I thought I'd leave the clumsiness there to let everyone see that I'm not a native speaker.

Now I realize that I'm really offending readers, and will think again.