All Comments on 'The Wicked Stepdaughter'

Another excellent story! Your writing ability far exceeds pretty much anything else here on Literotica.

A quick note, I think I caught 2 minor errors with character names, instead of saying Avani it said Faria. Once on page 3 and the second I think page 6?

You are too kind! I think there are tons of authors on Literotica that blow me out of the water.

My editing skills clearly need work too! Good catch on the jumbled names. I will see if I can get it fixed.

I totally agree with KingTitty, the quality of writing is exceptional. I appreciated this story, despite it not being one of my favorite themes. Kudos to RabbleLaid. I hope to see another chapter of Cross Contamination as well.

That. Was. Awesome. Count me on the side of King Titty. A couple minor errors as you admitted, but they did absolutely nothing to detract from the story. 5/5 stars and a pity I can't give more.

Dewey Cheatham

Kinda disappointed it ended with the straight stuff, otherwise was a good fic

While I love your writing, I was expecting more of an ending.

it is your story, but as an example of my thoughts :)

The buildup was insane than at the moment of the party where you could utilize the utter humiliation and revenge. basically nothing happend.

An example would be her announcing that she starts doing porn with her mother as her manager, while getting bigger boobs. afterwards start an orgy as her first porn, during which Faria would break her trance.

Forcing Avani to hate the humil, while being stimulated to an orgasam, waking her confused to her appointment with the doctor, getting bigger breasts (hello tripple D's)

The next few days while healing up with her mother to nurse her, she would embrace the new self.

also she will be at home recovering from her surgery but meanwhile doing live-cam of humil videos to earn back the money her mother paid with her new fun bags.

But that's... just an example of my twisted mind ;)

Thanks for the feedback! In the original outline, I did have elements of public humiliation in the finale, but in the end, I felt like it distracted from the core of Avani’s story: her humiliating personal submission to Madeline. So I went with a more intimate finale that gave Madeline a chance to demonstrate her complete control. A public fall from grace is certainly part of Madeline’s plan for Avani, as she hints towards the end of the story. Maybe I can write an epilouge story which explores Avani’s public disgrace in detail, and we can get the best of both worlds!

Not gonna lie, the whole series had me captivated... I do believe I have become a fan of your work and will continue reading your catalogue!

Thoroughly loved it! Just the right balance between dominance and care, humiliation and love.

An amazing story 5/5 would love to see the three of them at it again as a happy family

This is so amazing! the best story I've read in a long time I would love to see this continue

phenomenal story, please do a chapter 2 and lean more into her being a mommy's girl making her dress younger & treating her more like a child

So a story about an emotionally damaged woman being emotionally manipulated even more...alright.