by EmilyMiller
Staccato rhythm around every second, every inch but did not feel erotic. Highly descriptive but no sparks.
@Migbird - sorry to disappoint. This is not the stroker you are looking for. Em
Your illustrious tale of carnal eroticism left me with a tingling sensation twixt my nethers as they became engorged with arousal...
@Djmac1031 - back to the thesaurus, hun. Insufficient ornate polysyllables 🤣 Em
This was wonderful, and hot. I read it as a free-verse poem and I loved the rythyms I felt you make with the words.
@toesucker1 - prose poetry for sure, if taut doesn’t sound too pretentious. Glad you got it 😊 Emily
Hey Em, follow up comment: Did not have in mind a “stroker” when said this piece lacked an erotic feeling for me, though others clearly were stoked. What impressed me was the style — staccato pace; cadence and rhythm. Not to overthink this piece but when you mentioned Poe — maybe tongue in cheek — I got to thinking about his poetry and suspect if he’d depict erotic behavior poetically it would sexually excite [no bad porn] (?). In fact (and now definitely overthinking), some of his morose pieces of lost love/regret enjoyed an erotic element. Thanks for sharing your creativity — you clearly enjoy writing.
@Migbird - thanks for clarifying. Still not sure I 100% get it. Feel free to PM me if you like. Em
Ho. Lee. Cow. Lemme catch my breath. Pulse-ox says 98% and 91. Not something I'd... you know... but great tempo, building nicely from a comfortable moderato to a pounding prestissimo. Good job.
What I like so much about this story is the way you pull in the reader into the story, as if they are there themselves. Very good.