All Comments on 'A Bump in the Night'

Now my monitor is all blurry. Thanks a lot!

Interesting tale...

As always well written with believable characters

5 stars

Cagivagurl

Great MC's. Wonderful storyline. Thanks, 5.

Apart from an admittedly questionable choice of category (though as a Legend of LW he’s within his rights), this is one of LaptopWriter’s best in years. Absolutely loved it.

Okay, since it’s in the Loving Wives category I’m thinking; when’s the other shoe going to drop? Good story, and I’ll try and check out some of your other work. Never does one story make a writer, good or bad ☀️

Too good to be true. RISE from Ragpicker to cover model of Vogue, although near impossible, can be imagined but living that life for 3 years and then returning to the old life is 200% impossible.

Wonderful 5 star story. Thank you.

Great story. Thank you.

Great story thank you

So well done thank you for sharing.

Predictable but all the better for it. 5 stars easily

A wonderful feel good story. I was waiting for the MC to have to go on without his love. Some have said not realistic but I say doesn't matter as this story was entertaining and that's the main point for any story.

Thanks for your hard work.

Woodmanone

Nicely done, thank you. 5*

What I most enjoy about this fine author's work is that his characters speak and act like normal human beings. They are thoroughly believable. Suspending disbelief takes no effort at all.

Very well done.

A wonderful Cinderella story.

Another great story. I always seem to be able to connect with your characters. Thanks

Brilliant as usual!

Finally, a love story I can read and re-read. I kept waiting for the shoe to fall, but to my eternal gratitude, it never did. Five stars!

Absolutely wonderful and believable. Great characters, sharp writing, 5 stars.

Always a joy to read your stories. Was hoping for a little more tension from the initial move to Paris.

Very good story.

Another fantastic story for one of the best authors on this site. Thank you for sharing your talent.

Not quite a LW masterpiece, but close. Very real MCs, enthralling situations,, really well developed and written. Well worth Five stars.

One thing, I would have liked follow-up on the Texaco manager, but oh well...

JPB NOT BOB

Good story. Probably should have been Romance, though. 4*

Outstanding! You pos t in a tough category but you never disappoint.

Thank you. I was afraid they would split up at the end.

Of all the Literotica stories I have read over the years this isby far the best love story. Thank you.

Well done but

Too much fantasy.

Like a watered down Pretty Woman film.

Outstanding!

All I can say is, Bravo!

Hmm, goes from street hooker fucking the gas station guy to chaste globe trotting supermodel travelling the globe, never fucking anybody, not believable. If she had been a homeless woman fighting to keep her virtue and then was rescued might be believable. Not a LW story.

Wow, awesome LW/Romance hybrid, as many of the best LW stories are. Really well done.

Sweet and worth 5* (even if it should have been in Romance).

Neither party ever wavered in their commitment to each other in this story, which was refreshing. Classic rescue of a distressed damsel but the story is so well written that you can’t help but enjoy the ride! Well done.

Loved it. D

A modern romance which I liked very much. 5*

It’s a nice romantic story!

Nice story. It's not plausible that she traveled internationally as a top model for three years and didn't have sex with others.

Good job. Thank you

This was a great romance. I very much enjoyed it. Nice job!

Great story! I'm glad it worked out for them both.

5

Five stars for a nice romance. I, too, don't believe that living as a super model for three years, she wouldn't realize that she was out of his league. He was some guy that hit her with his car. She would probably still be a street person if he hadn't lifted her up so maybe she stayed out of guilt.

A great read, it did turn out different that I expected. Call it cynicism I guess. Thank you for sharing your work.

Just a really good story

Wow, that was a wonderful story and very intense. You’re one of my favorite writers. 5🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

This is one of those stories that occurs one in several thousand tries! We all have our favorite writes that do truly special work. I have enjoyed LTWs workbefore, but, this is

exceptional. 5 stars but really a 20 star effort!.

Fantastic. Definitely more romance. ..5stars

An amazing story, I really enjoyed reading it.

This is the second time I've said this lately, but lovely story, sir. 5 stars.

Sometimes a wild tale of treachery and betrayal is just the thing. Tonight I wanted to read a story of non-transactional kindness with true love and a happy ending. This story delivers that really well. Thanks for the time well-spent reading this tale. 5*

This is a lovely story, and I certainly wish it could actually take place. It seems unlikely to me, however, that a model who began her career by doing full nudity photo shoots could later be successful in high fashion modeling. The two worlds of erotic/pornographic modeling and fashion modeling seem to have no intetersection.

Phenomenal! A story with a good ending

Great story, but it was a very good Romance hardly a Loving Wives tale.

I really liked it it was told in the tradition Laptopwriter tells them and it scores 5/5

Why wasn’t this in Romance?

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Maybe because it’s Lit, I just can’t seem to believe Megan did fuck around constantly in tne years she was away. Yeah…they weren’t even engaged, but still…

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To that end, this ending in a “happy ever after” was pretty much too hard to believe. But OK.

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4 ****

A fabulous story that well deserved five stars.

Great read. Loved it

A incredible "Love Story" with a happy ending from the laptop of laptopwriter. Kudos and thanks for the story!.

Very well told story. I liked some of the character development and especially liked the ending....which surprised me, cynic that I am. One thing though I would have liked to known more about John?

I really enjoyed the story. Very well written. My initial instinct was to rate a 4/5 because the whole modeling across the world without ever banging someone in that occupation seemed far-fetched to me. But what the hell? This is fiction and I love a good ending. So I amend my score to 5/5. Thank you for a great story! BRB

Great story. I was so afraid Megan would find her ‘soul mate’ in Paris. I’m glad she came home.

Wonderful story. Megan went from basically nothing, to a world class model. Then, she went home and officially was made a wife, and another bonus, her name changed to mom! A wife and mother was her true destiny! 10 stars!

Ordinarily I hate White Knight stories because I know what happens to these poor SOBs in real life. That said, I actually enjoyed this one. Way better than the dreck usually foisted upon readers during BR58’s mutual masturbation events.

Beautiful! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I always love your characters and their dialogue. Once again you share a story that draws your readers in. Compelling. Five stars and I look forward to your next narrative.

got a cashier's check for what she stole and sent it to the corporate CFO alone with a full explanation for why she took it, the rapes she suffered at the hands of the night manager, and her suspicions concerning the robbery. I drove her to the next town over so the postmark wouldn't reveal her location and watched her drop in the mailbox.

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A cashiers check is drawn on a bank account, meaning it is trackable, so post marking the envelope from another town would be pointless

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also given the store had CCTV they would have been able to pull footage and get her face, again making her trackable

so . . . . . . .

he gave up living abroad FOR FREE for several years

and getting to work in a industry that would have advanced his skills and career

(because they would have given him a job to get a supermodel under contract)

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because he enjoyed his job as an hourly employ earning 40k a year

PRE TAXES

in a hole in the wall mall portrait studio next to a food court?

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And thats not even considering all the sex he gave up

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We sure he aint 'tarded?

A lovely and sweet story. I felt like John should have been bolder and gone to France. I was very nervous that the story would punish John for cowardice by having Megan fail John and move on.

A very nice Romance story. Great plot and characters. A distracting level of detail about irrelevant items, like what kind and how many lights he was going to use. Probably added 40% to the length of the story while adding nothing to the quality of the story. Details are not the same thing as substance. "We had a marvelous 5-course French dinner." As opposed to paragraphs about what was cooked, how it was prepared, how the menu was chosen, which wines were pared with each coarse, the size of the servings, the pattern of the plates, . . . etc. Less is more. Give it a try. And thanks for the effort.

This is the story of a unicorn. One extremely rare soul who saw life for what it really is... the love and friendship you get from people who are really important in your life. The people to whom you owe integrity and appreciation.

In her case, it was obviously her earlier life experiences that showed her just how valuable true relationships are. Without the no-strings-attached help with which she had been blessed, she could even be dead before she was a full adult. I think that makes the difference. Entitlement was never ingrained in her, like it is for so many people now. So all she had to do, was stay true to her inner nature, and not be dazzled by the money and glamour. She just needed wisdom beyond her years, and well beyond the norm.

It's this that makes the story marginally possible.

The chance of it working out the way it did, is probably about a one in a billion, but it's your story, so that's what happened and I'm glad for your characters.

5

Wonderful story Towards the end I was sure they were splitting up I must be an old romantic Wonderful ending Keep up your writing (jaybee186)

Best story I've read in a while. Loved it.

Add this up there with "Unicorn" Great read!!!!! 5 stars all the way!

Well done- I loved this tale!

Loved it!!! Thank you for writing, LTW!

Killed it LTW, 5*

5 stars - great romance story.

Thanks for sharing...

Nicely done! I really enjoyed the read. I man also grateful that you gave their love a chance ;)

You knocked it out of the park. 5 stars thrown your way.

Hooked

Thank you! Having a shitty week and this made me feel a lot better:)

I thought Little Bright Eyes would be hard to top, but in my humble opinion, this story scores higher.

Very sweet, very enjoyable story. It was well plotted and written and I liked how it ended. 5* and thank you for participating in the WG event.

10 big blazing stars to writer. Only problem was ending too unrealistic! The real conclusion was she was fucking all these models she was meeting at all the gigs. She got into drugs like MDMA ecstasy cocaine and more. Had orgies almost every night, feel in love with the "fast lane" she burned everyone that helped her and forgot about them all. Finally she OD on heroin never heard from again. Sad but much more realistic. She used her pussy to get thru life and like most homeless women became a whore. Modeling just changed her John's. If she had a y feelings for her almost Hubby she NEVER EVER would have left him for Paris. She was just a cheap whore I. The end. Buster2U

Like others, I kept fearing some affair and breakup. LW can be monogamous. Great tale - 5.

Loved it!

Very well done.

J'apprécie le style et l'histoire. Et surtout le fait qu'elle puisse nous emmenr dans plusieurs directions et ne jamais laisser préjuger la fin. Vraiment agréable.

Nice story

Perfect story for Loving Wives. There were several moment of reader's angst, like when John got to the beach shoot. The cynic expected John to see the photographer pawing at a smiling but top-less Megan in order to "pose" her. Or maybe John does go to Paris and arrives just as Megan walks out of her apartment holding on to some GQ stud, telling him "You're a great lover Henri. You really know how to use that big coc...?!...John! You're in Paris!?"

So glad it ended well for John and Megan. 5 of them!

Wouldn't the hospital have filled out the birth certificate?

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"No, she'd just try to talk me into going back and I can't live like that again. I could never go back to that." - She's an adult, her mother can TRY to talk her into going back, she can say, "No."

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If she had no ID, how would the gas station have known who to file charges against? They obviously didn't, LOL!

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"I only took it because I hadn't been paid and I figured they owed it to me" - If they owed it to her, why does she need to pay it back?

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"grey suit with the big red "S"" - Grey? I thought Superman's suit was blue?

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Okay, I love a happy ending, and this was an easy five stars, but it was an obvious fairy tale. In reality, he never would have made three years, would have barely made one.

That's was a sweet story. loved it

Not sure why this one isn’t in romance, but great piece of work! Solid balance of narrative and dialogue. It may be a little like a Hallmark movie, but it gives us hope that true love does exist. 5.0*

You are an artist. Thanks. 5*

Wow, you had me scared there for a while; with it posted in L/W instead of Romance I was beginning to fear she would end up with some rich dude and leave her rescuer behind.

Excellent tale, earned a favorite from me.

G

A fantastic love story, very well written and an emotional heartfelt ending! 5*+

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Exceptionally well written!

For once a happy ending to a lw story, very well written great job.

A true loving wife's story.

I checked a number of times to be sure that it was LW and not Romance

Ok. By leaps and bounds my absolute favorite piece of work from this author. I could not stop reading until I finished it and then went back to double check stuff. This was an absolute pleasure to read and re-read.

Really nicely done. A rare treat . Megan must have been one in a million to give up modeling for a middle class life. No drugs,no affairs, wow. A real feel good ending.