All Comments on 'The Speakeasy'

very good start, and please keep writing

Learn how to write dialogue. English uses quotation marks.

Great start. Loved it! Keep writing, learn to improve as you go.

Ok, nice opening. What happens next? It's always better to do a full work. Very least is to indicate what parts are to come.

Anticipation can be great foreplay.

Certainly working on me!