by MxdGrlMusic
Love the story and the way its going cant wait for the Final Showdown between Devin & Pierce. of course Devin being the Weasle he is will bring Jaylyn in on his behalf.
Sorry Excuse
Curt
I WISH I COULD MAKE YOU WRITE THEM FASTER....AND DAMN WHY CANT ALL MEN BE LIKE PIERCE ;) PLEASE KEEP GOING...DONT DISAPPEAR FROM US ANYTIME SOON :)
and I like the characters. There are still quite a few editing mistakes. For the most part you've fixed the tenses, which is great. Keep on working on it and you'll continue to get better. An editor would be a big help too!
I'm glad that he whooped Devin's butt. And I love Pierce. He is so dark and sexy. Yumm.
Finally that douche got caught and LOL fat boy Johnny was worried about the food and not the fight hilarious
I love interracial romances because it gives people (or me) an opportunity to experience something I haven't experienced -- yet; however, I find it funny that black men have been demonized in this story. His name is Devin. Really? Not all black men or demonic or evil. I know it is just a story, but when I read about individuals automatically "demonizing" a character, it makes me sad. I'm just a reader though. Oh yeah, I've enjoyed reading your story, but an editor would make it 10 times better! Please keep writing, and please make the antagonist of another race or even make them white. Just my opinion . . . Best regards!