All Comments on 'Good Bye Promise Ch. 01'

Great start looking forward to more. Maybe longer chapters next time. LoL

Good first effort.

great start, I can't wait to see where this is going

I agree with the other reader, the only problem with it is that it could be a bit longer but other than that so far so good, I' am liking the characters and can't wait to see where it goes, so keep up the good work! I will be checking for an update to this piece soon!

Very impressive for your first story. It is very smooth, flows well. Well-written without mistakes. I like that you started in present time before giving us a view of how they met. Look forward to more.

Please continue.

Overall I liked it. The writing was generally tight, and while I can see where this is going, I think I'll enjoy the ride.

Couple of things I'd like to point out. There were a couple of paragraphs in which the speaker changed back and forth. That made re-reading some parts mandatory, and that gets tiresome. One speaker = one paragraph.

Also, who is Jake? Is it Tyler after a mental lapse?

Keep writing, just pay a little more attention to detail.

Oh, and longer chapters work better on this site. You'll get everything from mild complaints to full-throated condemnation for parceling out tiny bits like this.

not bad of a start, but as mentioned before,

who is "Jake"?

and it being a little longer would be nice.

other than that, not bad