All Comments on 'The After-Party'

...at the third sentence in a row featuring "whilst."

Nice enough for an initial entry. Thanks for the effort. Keep working at it if the pleasure of describing pleasure makes you hot. lol Not all people enjoy the polished clean look of a pre-pubescent female. Put a bush on something when you can.

Good story.

Putting a story in the wrong section inevitably leads to lower scores. This wasn't a romantic story, so those who thought it was will be disappointed.

This is a quick flash that starts off as a rough erotic coupling then goes to masturbation.

There is nothing at all romantic about it.

Voted it a one for the deception.