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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Eh, you asked for feedback..

This isn't a poem, it's a shopping list.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
not quite there

I like the idea of the narrator altering the description as their experience of love turns sour with the meaning of love transforming as the poem progresses but the rendering of this good idea isn't up to scratch.

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I'm a novice writer expressing my creativity by writing erotic stories. My hobbies include running, going to the gym, watching K-dramas, and board games. I'm a mid 50’s married male and very young for my age. I can proudly hold chopsticks, and yeah, I try to be humorous. Thoug...

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