All Comments on 'Lullaby'

to await the violence enroute. TK U MLJ LV NV

You kept a good structure throughout and the metre and stresses worked too. I'm assuming the "tits charmer" was a typo. You could work on the punctuation, as it might help the definition you seek come out - for instance:

Incessant Noise! That's not quite...or is it Incessant noise: that's not quite...

and

My lord the grinning python plays should ... or is that My lord, the grinning python, plays should or My lord, the grinning python plays, should...

But this is detail - good stuff overall - Sweet O.

Well done! It certainly has a hypnotic quality to it in both the images and the rhythm: ocean waves; slender women whirling by in their sarees; undulating roads.

I particularly liked how the noise kept you awake on the one hand but bought you to a state of what I would describe as bliss, not quite "the empty mind" suggested in meditation because the senses are taking it all in, but an overwhelming peace of mind. Yet, the rational part keeps asking for answer as to why instead of just accepting it, giving in to it, ejoying it. At least this is what the poem meant to me, perhaps because I've been there only to have asked "Why is this happening?"

You, however, seem to have succeeded: "...makes my mind unbend...."

I think this is a wonderful poem about the human condition full of wonderful mystery.

I agree with S.O. about the punctuation.

Very hypnotic and exotically suggestive! Better than counting sheep, even! :)