All Comments on 'A Girl Can Dream'

I wished i could have been there she looked beautiful and so luscious to look at .

Pat Murray

Atlanta,Ga.

This was a very nice fantasy, but it was not very hot.

Unlike the previous commenter, I think this was HUGELY "hot", simply because, as he says, "it wasn't very hot". It's the subtlety that raises the temperature, not blatent porn, and I loved it. Thank you so much for a delightful vignette, which I have downloaded for future pleasure. I have noted your nom de plume, and will look for more of your stuff. It's super. FRED./

zorel, this is wonderful. i love the way you build the anticipation in this piece and the wonderful attention to the setting and details. you have a keen eye for setting a scene and i admire that.

ed

Thank you for your helpful comments and feedback Ed, Fred, Pat and Scribbles. I feel a little silly voting for my own story, but I don't see a way to leave a comment for all of you otherwise.

~Zorel~

This story was so erotic, I could almost have been there. The way you build up to the unleashing their pleasure is pure talent. The descriptions of texture and smell really brings the story to life. I will definitely be looking for more of your work.

Keep it up!

Scoobie

So erotic, simply beautiful. I love stories like this. The blue eyed brunette goddess making love to a red headed, green eyed angel was just wonderful. And the choice of their clothing cannot be outdone: it went so well with the setting. I don't think I'll read anything that even comes close to how sexy this story was. Great work, babe!

IM ..... GONNA ..... CUMMMM ..... (OHHH YES!!!!! IF ONLY I HAD A NOTHER GIRL TO BLOW ME LIKE THAT I WOULD NEVER LET HER GO)!!!

Very, very erotic.... A wonderful dream...thank you

This needed another draft to polish grammar and description. Clumsy lines that jarred such as 'Her and I waited'; 'spread her legs a wee bit more'; 'we both lay down, tits to tits', spoilt any sense of an erotic atmospheric build up. The story itself is fine. Just needs some more work.

as above