All Comments on 'A Growing Lust'

First, I'll point out that you seem like a fine writer who has good descriptive skill.

Unfortunately, and maybe it's just me, but I just didn't think this was very hot at all. Don't get me wrong, I think the "older woman/young girl" scenerio is a crowd pleaser, but having the husband peering from the closet seems so seedy. It's supposed to be lesbian sex, not creepy man jacking off in a closet. Honestly, I felt bad for the girl, she was just being used in order to spice up the couples love life and didn't even know it.

On a strictly literary note, I believe that you would benefit with some traditional quotation dialouge. It really would have made the story easier to follow.

I just have one question. Where has all the romance gone?

Becca

First, I'll point out that you seem like a fine writer who has good descriptive skill. Unfortunately, and maybe it's just me, but I just didn't think this was very hot at all. Don't get me wrong, I think the "older woman/young girl" scenerio is a crowd pleaser, but having the husband peering from the closet seems so seedy. It's supposed to be lesbian sex, not creepy man jacking off in a closet. Honestly, I felt bad for the girl, she was just being used in order to spice up the couples love life and didn't even know it. On a strictly literary note, I believe that you would benefit with some traditional quotation dialouge. It really would have made the story easier to follow. I just have one question. Where has all the romance gone? Becca

that grows big with enjoyable interludes. But I agree with the previous poster. The story could have done without the spying conspiracy between the husband and wife. I saw that as a betrayal of the unsuspecting girl's trust.

I disagree that the husband's watching made it "seedy." As a husband myself, I found the voyeur aspect to make the story hotter. If it were my wife, I'd want to watch. The husband in this story struck me as much more loving than creepy, IMO.

I do agree that some more traditional dialogue would have strengthened the story and the characters.

Keep up the good work.

It was hot. But I didn't like the fact the husband was there

To see my wife naked with other men, is wonderful, I have seen her at a nude beach climb a tree naked, with her legs wide apart as she got to a height to look at an orchid plant, she stayed there for about 5 minutes as about 7 men, young and old had a very good look at her open Hairless cunt, we talked about it when having sex that night, she told me she knew exactly what she was doing, and love to know all the males were looking at her 35 Y/O nude woman body.

Ben. Age 65.