All Comments on 'Alcibaides'

Good first time. A little short.

Mind your space between the lines, so you don't lose the connection between words.

E.g.: 'Sure!'

was her only response.

I look forward for follow-up.

Good story but, from my personal point of view it was too short and didn't have enough action.

I think it would make your great story more beleiveable if you fleshed out the part about why you are able to control these women. A bit more detail if you please.