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by Tara Cox

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
Five stars as I want to encourage women writers . . .

But why is the main character telling him what they did? He was already present at the activities.

Change from second person to third person, perhaps omnipotent third person who sees everything, and can describe what the characters are feeling.

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