All Comments on 'An Office Party'

There are many many office party stories around, so the problem is making yours stand out from the bunch. A Truth or Dare game, Strip Poker scene, 3 chicks, 1 guy, whatever it takes. This could have been longer and more erotic. Definitely keep writing! I have two contest entries, The Mask (funny) and Who Killed Lois Laynes? a murder mystery. Feel free to comment/make suggestions. Best, Sack

It's a nice enough story, but I missed some attention to the girl's body. No harm in making it a bit longer to give your readers some more details.

Good luck.