All Comments on 'Before You Lock Up'

You know, overall I liked this. It could have used a little editting...mostly for the run-on sentances. I think you could have done more with the whole things overall...a tad too short. Good effort though and keep going becasue that is how we improve...we practice. I smell a part two. :)

Very descritive of the feelings of the moment. Yes, one minute we're looking, the next minute we're invited to join in.

Jeepers, if you're going to use the word L-y-c-r-a, don't spell it Lyric.

An editor would help a lot.

Definitely too short. Why go to the strap-on so fast? What about foreplay both ways? How about breasts doing more/having more done to them than just pointing at the ceiling?