All Comments on 'Best Shower!'

I really liked the sensory details and the pacing. It captures the feel of a romantic, sexual moment. This story would rate 100 except for some basic proofreading errors. Specifically, the pronoun change between "you" and "he" makes it seem as if the story shifts from an interlude between a couple to a threesome. There are a few improperly used words ("suite" instead of "suit") and some punctuation/capitalization problems.

Let's not wait six years until your next story, okay? Very much enjoyed - you might look in to getting an editor...

Other than a few misspelled words, I thought this story was very hot and erotic. Written with a lot of passion as if it was a real encounter that the author has recalled and written about. Thanks for the post.

This reads like a how to manual for an awesome night of hot sex.. in fact i may have to try some of it out for myself.....

Thanks!!!