by barbarianqueen
considering the subject, bigfoot and it's not a topic that much is known of or really talked about- i liked what you did. it was actually ingenius to give bigfoot a new perspective & have it not be just a big ape running through the woods, but a disguise for an alien race to observe mankind. that you could write it into a erotic-love story was really nice. i give kudos for having a happy reunion at the end.
Could have been better. The sentences are too short, and a little disjointed, which can be easily fixed. The storyline itself was great! A little sweet, a little sexy and a little quirky; if you fix the flow I think you'd have one hell of a story here.
you could have done more with what you had. to bad you repeated yourself on the sex scenes.
A great, well crafted little romantic story. Its kick relies on emotional involvment as well as the usual sexual mechanics, which is refreshing. I also liked the way that the Bigfoot was different to how I'd imagined him.
I liked your story with a nice romantic ending. One point: I think it's a pity you kind of repeat yourself in the sex scenes.
A bit more variation in the words and the actions would make it even better.