by Samuelx
It was a very hot group/bisexual story, but the lack of dialogue and the poor punctuation tended to be frequent enough to be distracting. It was also rather short and rushed. I give it a 4, however, for sheer, nasty fun. This was an orgy that would be much better if Samuelx would take the time to deliver his normal level of quality.
Having read his work, I know that he is capable of doing better than this. I strongly urge him to revise and resubmit this story, or look for a good Volunteer Editor if he is in as much of a hurry to write at the moment as this story indicates. He is normally a much better writer than this, IMO. The bad grammar and lack of dialogue is particularly disappointing since the content itself is so hot and sexy that I wanted to give it a higher score.