by slave31
I don't know why but I so didn't like this story, just made me want to smack them both.
felt like I was reading a comic book with all the pseudo sound effects, which completely detract from the story !
so poorly done. can't say that i was taken in by the style. left the characters rather lifeless. agree with poster who said it felt like reading a comic book. came off as rather juvenile. maybe redo it in a different style? the concept was a good one.
It was a good read and I laughed a little but there was no story, it was straight forward and I didn't know what I was reading. It started getting good at the end but of course you ended it.
Also, the boy actually says ''boo-hoo''? And he ''sobs'' from the early stage of the ''bullying''? He also said he's going to tell on her. The boy sounded like a 10 year old.