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by potkettle

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bear2readbear2readalmost 17 years ago
Get some help

Story had good possibilities, but you definitely need to work on your grammar. The writing is stilted and too simplistic. It would appear to me that you need somebody to copyedit/proofread your work before submitting it the next time.

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