All Comments on 'Chloe's Internship Ch. 06'
by mchucha
- 13 Comments
Anonymousabout 14 years agoMore great work here. What's really awesome is the give and take between Chloe and the guys in the office, it's a great set-up and she's the perfect character for it, especially because things don't get too extreme, at least not yet. This could definitely be on par with dlsloan's best. Can't wait for more, and especially the office tease situations. Some of the best potential on these boards, and a couple of classic scenes already.
dlsloanabout 14 years agoThe best new author on the site gets better with every chapter. Can't wait to read more!
Anonymousabout 14 years agoBest new author on the site. You are on my list of favorites along with fronker, dlsloan and davidwriter
Anonymousabout 14 years agoGreat story thus far! You mentioned turning it into a cartoon.. that would be good. Definately keep writing more of these!
Anonymousabout 14 years agoFantastic story, can't wait for more. Thanks so much for sharing
Anonymousabout 11 years agoI enjoyed the story but at time there are some unexpected items which tend to distract from the story. For example, early in the story she says the only people in the office are Mark, Carlos and Jim. However she speaks to Brian. Since he was mentioned before she said this "only" sentence, perhaps the author felt no need to mention again. But later she talks of Edward spilling his drink. Where did he come from? And still later Sanjay is mentioned. Now we have 6 men in the story where only 3 are in the office? This is my best example, but not the only case of items mentioned early in the story but later items contradict when is mentioned earlier with no explanation.
SZENSEIover 3 years agoEver play the drinking game of Stop the Bus? If not it goes like this...The dealer lays 10 cards face down. One by one, the dealer flips a card over. ( ARTHUR ) If it's a number card, nothing happens and the dealer continues to the next card. ( THE OFFICE ) If it's a face card or an Ace, the player riding the bus has to drink: One drink for a Jack, two for a Queen, three for a King and four for an Ace. ( THE RIDERS OF THE BUS )
Nice job Mama.
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