by tarnished_knight
Not bad, not bad. I love your filthy mouth and the depiction of her pleasure is top notch. I'm definitely looking forward to finding more of your work.
Rather liked how you got straight to it. No preamble. Hand up the skirt. Loved that..
I loved your characters and all of the dialogue. I love how they interacted with each other. Amazingly Hot!
Absolutely loved every bit of it! The dialogue, the built-up... Oh wow!
(btw, it's Tara85 from the other place...). Looking forward for more!
A hot erotic tale about two lovers sexual tension and hunger for each other. The descriptions of sexual intimacy were right on the money. Thank you for the ride down Fantasy Alley.
Your story was hot, the descriptions, hotter, I really enjoyed it all the way thru. It came across as real to me.
I look forward to reading the rest of your stories.
Cheers
Great use of dialogue. It was playful, natural and showed your characters' personalities well. The way you set the scene created warmth and some great sexual tension.
I think this one is my new favourite of yours.
In more ways than one, I was sad to see this end. More please ;)
Very sexy..... and well written. Will be reading more of you soon....
Tempz