by StoredDreams
Absolutely outstanding. Very well written. Hotter than the lowest level of hell. Enjoyed it completely. Definite 5 Star.
A very bare story. It does not go anywhere, it has no meaning.
Interesting adaptation of the "unknown visitor" scene. Nicely written, even though not very erotic
Good, but not great! Not enough tension (AKA drama) ... the cologne had to carry the heaviest load (and did not 'deserve' mention in round two?) Same as round one? No cologne? A different cologne??
3.8 = 4*
The start was good, altouth, you should have continue with the thoughts and dialogs later in the story.
Another POS husband who thinks it's fun to get his wife raped for her birthday.
The cologne present on the first guy should have been detected on the second guy. If not, then you been hit by a, smooth criminal.