All Comments on 'Dinner at Six'

Please don't submit this same old story. Your kind are not intelligent enough to write a good one.

When a guy hits my cervix, I don't like it. Sometimes it's more scary than it hurts, but either way, it's not pleasurable. Just be aware that it may not be viewed as erotic.

Otherwise, the Jilted Male Cry Baby Club will be around to one-bomb you. Hey, the poor guys are trying to rebuild their egos. It's the only way they know how.

Second paragraph, we get a great new erotica word. Pervious! Maybe it's just a Freudian slip, or a malaprop! I can't wait to use it again! Shortly after that, we get a wig from Alabama - Auburn hair! That turns into the more likely 'auburn hair' a little later! I liked it better the first time.

Michael, as Hubby, was mentioned early, then around the middle and at the end. Better than some authors, and one of my pet peeves regarding (some) aspirant LIT authors. Michael (Hubby, remember?) will eventually hear about this tryst, her second and more thorough episode with Matt the Bull (I am inattentive enough to prefer Hubbies and Bulls to have names starting with different letters!) Except for apparently being present (as an observer?) in the (brief and mostly undocumented) first tryst, Hubby has no REAL role in this story ... except to establish Sweetie as a married woman! Leave Mikey out and the resulting Erotic Couplings story is essentially UNCHANGED!

3.7 AKA 4*

Congratulations for your first publication!

Go on ;)

Don't let the critics get you down. If this is your first, as one implied, you did pretty darn good. I going to give what I hope you will take as helpful comments. #1 Proofread, proofread, proofread. #2 Proofread again but this time do it aloud saying every word. Our eyes will read a complete sentence at a time if we aren't careful. Aloud will cure that. Good luck.

I love it! I happen to be one of those commenters, but all the same, from the female cheater perspective, very funny. Oh yeah, the story. Run of the mill. Find a way to be funny or end with a surprise, anything to separate yourself from the crowd.

Another stupid fucking cunt.

Benito read this whorewifes and cuck story after it posted and was so ashamed that he never write again. Good decision.