by jeb22
The flow of the story reminds one of a hooker placing her mark on a john at an outof town convention. The fact that she used mental subliminal suggestion to bring her prey to her way of use. This has the earmarks to make a serial of stories and how she takes him to the hint of financial domination, possible humiliation and all with the stroking of sensual domination.Thanks for keeping the tenses current and the occupants vivid, hope to read more.
i hope that you will continue this and make it a series. i very much enjoyed the characters and the descriptions. you write very well.
The story has good pacing and lead-up. An intro that leaves a number of unanswered questions - an opening for subsequent chapters.