by Scorpio44
Sarah and her friends sound like stepford wife's...and nobody missing Eric?!! Fantasy fiction on lit needn't touch the real world....
Very good start to what we hope will be a very long story of a slave cunt pleasing her new master. Hope more nasty public exhibition follows.
While I am not a great lover of BDSM this has to be one of the best stories, of the genre, that I've read. The obvious love that Nick has for Sarah makes the D/S theme so much more acceptable. This fine tale deserves to be explored in depth with Cheryl, and her other friends, taking a more active part. As ‘A Horny 'ol Sailor’ said - a "Dom/Sub with compassion". More please!
in the telling of this tale. You should explore the feelings a bit more, they both had someone special in their lives leave them. There should be more anger, not only in their loss, but i think she would be angry as well, doubting herself, might feel she needs to be punished. A nice punishment to move on and know that this is right. I think she would need a little less tenderness, it seems she craves the harsher treatment more. Explore her clothing even more, it would really be a sign of the man's ownership of her. I think bondage might be a good addition to the storyline as well. But, all in all, a well written tale of friendship and the true submission that some women crave.
This has to be one of the best BDSM stories I've read in a long time. I too like the D/s theme with the love Nick seems to have for Sarah. It looks like this story may be continued and I hope it does. A story like this deserves to be explored in more depth.
Thanks for writing!
Ray
You've told a very good story, well worth the reading. Thank You. Ronnie W.