by Grayeyedsub2
Standing in line with any number of random strangers, you made me feel as if any one of them could be like you and I could be your main protagonist... well done!
No one knows how to sensualize and romantacize a blowjob like Miss Gray.
Your detail and tone was excellent throughout, and you gave enough of it to give me a picture but not to over-detail it, making me not only have to work with something, but let it wander as well. Very good, Gray, not a lot have that kind of literary power!
Very sexy, very romantic...why don't you write full time, I dunno. :D
Oh my dear Gray,
That "blew me away". So sensual so very sexy..So jealous of Kull...lol Well done my childe.
This story like all of your others is an intelligent read while also making me squirm!!!
like the way you lead the reader into the story as if we are actually standing in line watching this all play out. then i like the detail and sensations you describe to the point i feel as if i'm actually Kull. Gray i hope you keep doing this you have a flair for it ;) It wouldn't let me sign in.Yusan
Grey this is fantastic! You blended the perfect amount of details with actually storyline. I love it.
Amazing, I'm happy someone suggested this story for me :) Great job!
This was a pleasant surprise of a quickly escalated fantasy in an unexpected setting. A diner is just so unexpected and with people. It really drove the intensity of the desire. - LthrBrfCase
I could feel the magnatism between your characters as if I was actually there watching them. Hope you keep it up and let me know when you submit the next one.
radiant1.2009
I love that a character gets into giving oral so much to just drop to her knees in public. Very hot!
With a few simple sentences, a scene is set. Wasting no words, Grayeyedsub paints a picture of public desire and voyeuristic satisfaction that is powerful for both its intensity and economy. Allowing the reader to feel drawn into the story, while at the same time giving them the chance to add their own small details to the fantasy. A great stand alone work but one hopes it is the strong start of a series I will continue to pay attention to. Wonderful job Grayeyedsub!
Had to read it twice to make sure, and realized it was just her imagination and that it hadn't really happened right there out of nowhere! Would have been twisted that way. So far so good. Talk about escalated whew.