by M Crim
Bro is the biggest douche bag in this story. Don't walk sissy run. The best he will EVER be is a whore.
I enjoyed reading this story. Maybe you could add a bit more of her emotions, or reasons for nailing her brother.
Also the part where she asks about the girlfriend giving a BJ needs a little work. I didn't see her using the word BJ, needs to be more subtle?
All in all good job and most of all thanks for sharing!
It stories like these that really make me hate dumb people.Vinny was just trying to protect is stupid slut sister. She threw away her virginity like it was money. She is so stupid and foolish. Get rid of this story now it just going to piss of sortin people badly include me. Should of saved it for someone special like Vinny.
I really liked the style you write. It's so natural. You don't mask it with flowery descriptions. So that it's almost like you're standing in front of me, reading it. I like when writers write just like they're talking.
I feel like your trying to make the characters have emotions, but your not succedding very well. Two things make us hot, and i didnt get off to this story at ALL. I couldnt even get hard, it bored me. Its a good try...but dont 'try' anymore.
THAT WAS HOT! Please do not stop writing this story! I had to make myself cum twice while reading it. Keep up the great work! Would love to hear more about Vinny and Bianca!
Excellent--Written like a real experience and written as only a woman could write it. Would like to read about thanksgiving.
Great story! Very hot! Loved the buildup and you do a great job describing the action of the story! Awesome