All Comments on 'Helping Out a Friend'

I like nothing better than a woman dressed yet exposed, sexily sublime. Made a most enjoyable read, with the images in my mind!

Don't know exactly what to say. Enjoyed the concept; first sections were a decent read. For me, it fell apart the last section. Read like a totally unbelievable fantasy - and not one that was realistic.

You have some good ideas floating around inside your head, and you've managed to incorporate some skill in your descriptions and the flow of the story. This has the potential of being a good story to read.

But you're not quite up to speed yet in the way you actually *write*. That's not the ideas or plots, it's the way you put them together by using punctuation, the way that you can avoid spelling errors creeping in, and such.

In other words: you have the ideas, but there's a disconnect between your ideas and the nuts&bolts of the way you express those ideas in writing.

Now, you'll read comments all over Literotica about grammar nazis, people obsessing about spelling, and such. Negatives are really easy to throw at a writer and trip them up, and nobody who writes is immune from them. But please, please, re-read your story and look at the punctuation and how its use can change the flow of a piece of writing and turn it into a success or failure. For any writer, any progress is good progress.

I feel that you developed a beautiful relationship between Kathy, her husband, & Art.

But, in the end, you destroyed the whole thing by introducing Phil & degrading Kathy to being just another female slut.

She's the heroine here, not the whore.

She loves her husband & she wants to console the widower of her best friend.

She's not a whore, she's a loving wife.

I demand a re-write.

Kathy, her husband & Art can have a very loving relationship all by them selves!!!

The first three parts were exciting with innocent flirting, unexpected flashing, and concern about the feelings of each party. The fourth part unexpectedly turned into a discipline session with Kathy just being passed around. Not the tender sharing I expected the story to end with.