All Comments on 'He's Her's Now'

Lovely start...more...more...more. Thanks

A story such as this is all about setting a mood. Unfortunately the many grammatical and editing errors never allow that mood to occur.

Both commentators are right. Your story is a solid one and is very promising. Please take the time to proof read your story 2-3 more times. For example, he kissed your "pushing" and you wanted him to give you a "chase" kiss (while he was running?) Spell checker can't fix thise errors, and they do detract from your good ideas. Do keep writing, though you do not need the ' in hers in your title.

and you shaved him then he's back in underwear and you shaved him again?

My chocolate goddess. Will u allow me to be your pet