All Comments on 'Home Body'

Get an editor.

Keep going and see where it leads you and all of us that are reading.

I like it and two thumbs up?

Never read anything like it please continue

There was a lot to like there! And I'd like a continue. :)

A story worth reading more than one time!!

Like the others before wrote, take pride in your work and carry the story on!

It's a great concept. Take pride in your work and the time to do it correctly and it could be great. Sloppy spelling is just being lazy.

please continue

Spelling was a minor issue, and easily corrected. Keep measurements realistic though.

A 10" waist is simply not possible with 40" hips. Do the math. If the circumference is 10", this means the waist cannot be more than 6-8" wide at best. A 40" Hip with comparable measurements for depth (no pelvic bone you could use for a bookshelf), the hips would be 10" wider than the waist. A more realistic measurement would be 20-26".

Enough of that though. Your sex scenes are good. Expand on all aspects, and I thing you have got the basis of a top notch story!

What a storyline. It's like this little bit here could be blown up into something huge by itself.

Yes, please continue; your ideas are very original and intriguing ^^ Can't wait to read up more~!

This was great very different would like to see more of this story and where it leads. Watch your spelling.