All Comments on 'I Made My Sister Ch. 03'

2 stroke its over,

The story starts out being told from a 1st-person POV (the son's) but about halfway through it changes to a 3rd-person POV. You might want to revise this so that it's consistently from the son's POV, as the previous 2 chapters were.

how old is this kid? He's supposed to be 18 but you have written the conversation to make him seem like he's 8....which is it?

GOOD STORY. GOOD PREMIS. TOO SHORT.

pitty it is so short. very hot