All Comments on 'Into the Darkness'

I really enjoyed your tale of lust run rampid. I hope that you will continue it with a follow up the next day.

Very very well written....took me seconds to get hard...please keep up the good work and write a part 2!!!!

he cries so loud and long ---- mother, daughter, and grand daughter: he drove all 3 women mad. one died; one fuckin' went away; the oldest one's trying to feed him with her shrinkin' breast. piss poor of a little boy-man: Why Donna? Why aren't you here, when it was our daughter's being lowered to the ground forever? I missed you so much, I forgave you, your affairs,,, just come back to me; I can't live without you; I think I'm gonna kill myself; now that our daughter's dead, and you're gone and never wanting to come back to love me, little sad me, again, I don't feel like living any longer....... Mother-in-law, I need some milk here! Fuckin' retard character, and some people think he's a brilliant character! This world is full of strange people, indeed! LOL

Great Story Of Loss,Pain and Release.

Thank you for sharing with us!

nightstalker1960,

I am having alot of trouble figuring out who is who in your

story you start out saying and telling something about Karen and julie and other people in a broken sentences who is julie and who was buried in the casket you should try telling something of the background of the story so people like me can understand what your talking about in the story plus the story is way to short when is the second chapter?

Pat

Very interesting story. You COULD have been a bit more detailed in the characters. I felt a bit outside the story, wondering about the characters. But, for a short story, you did a good job of bringing out the hero's despair and a bit of his anger.

I'm looking forward to the second verse to get to know the characters and their relationships better.

At the very beginning, I thought perhaps the wife had died and it was her funeral, but you quickly made it clear that it was his daughter that had died, and apparently her boyfriend as well. His sense of total loss was painfully apparent. It was sad and moving, and the sex between him and his mother-in-law was also realistic to me, except <b>perhaps</b> her rather crude language. Then again, death of a loved one stirs the strongest, deepest emotions and fears inside of all of us. Not only of the loss of a loved one, but fear of death itself.