All Comments on 'Intrigued Ch. 10'

Didn't see that one coming. No pun.

Why...What...

I definitely didn't see that happening. I don't even know how to feel right now, my emotions are ranging from sad to freaking livid! ARGH

I have to agree with Got2luvmel and everyone else. 1 I pray this isn't the end. Secondly I just didn't see that one, I can only think it was Raven's maker that got that one man to audit Keegan's bussines.

gobsmacked is all i can think of right now, i hope this isnt the last chapter and that he finds a way to get her back

RAVEN & KEEGAN 4EVER!!!!!!!!! he's been thru enough & deserves love!!!

Could Dorian be influencing Raven's mind? What a creep. He left her and I think he only wants her now because she has made a life with someone else.

no no no! Raven needs to go back to him!!! update soon!

How could you write this chapter? This chapter completely piss me off! As of now im stop reading your stories!

I had a feeling something like this was going to work it's way into the plot... But still, actually 'reading' it now is like having a train run over my leg. Figured it was comming, still shocked to see it happen

I was lucky enough to read all of your chapters in one sitting. I've really enjoyed the story so far and am interested in where you plan to take the story. Keegan most likely will be in danger and very confused if he tries to "rescue" Raven. As for Raven, being captive to the one that ruthlessly took her humanity should be heartbreaking. Looking forward to seeing how you plan to wrap it up for this very special couple.

if this is the last chapter to this story be sure to realize you will loose a lot of fans and readers. not all stories have happy endings but this seemed like drama for the sake of drama and in a story that otherwise flowed it seemed out of place.

The story is NOT over, I just had alotta ish to deal with BUT if some of you guys wanna get all pissy and stop reading, FINE but this IS NOT the end!

-Bizzy

To the author, your stories ROCK!! Please, please update soon, I'm on needles and pins waiting. LOL. Can't wait for the next installment.

i feel so bad fof keegan. i hope he gets her back.

You fucking ruined it

Not entirely sure what the other reader's problems are; I thought it was a very good and interesting development. It is your story, pooh-pooh to the naysayers!

Once again your ability as a writer amazes me. I've become so engaged with the characters that I was actually angry when Raven gets taken away from Keegan. It makes complete sense that her maker would come and take her away. It's quite possible he felt his influence on her fading away as she fell more in love with Keegan. If she didn't still have doubts that she was hurting Keegan by being with him it's quite possible, in my mind at least, that she could have resisted her maker. Her being taken forces her to deal with more of the problems that lie between her and Keegan being truly happy together. My only hope is that in the end Keegan does get her back.

Awesome story Bizzy_Bish. Keep up the great work.

I just knew Raven's Maker would show his face again. Wouldn't surprise me to learn he was the one that caused the troubles with Keegan's business in order to lure him away from Raven.

Have to admit I'm sad Raven had sex with Dorian. Poor Keegan.