by swatz4me
Seems like both Paul and Becky are getting what they deserve. Keep up the good work!
I enjoyed the set-up and the delivery of a seemingly realistic situation. The pacing was well-done and the first-person perspective worked.
I would have liked to see more dialogue, however, and a little more proofreading would help eliminate some stumbling blocks in the prose.
Ignore the previous asshole. Just because it isn"t his thing he thinks nobody should like it. I hope there is a part two coming.
Its pretty plain that she does not love you , just power and having a new permanent slave for her and her friends (female). Its proabbly too late to start a new life anywhere local without blackmail and blackmail pictures etc.
Leave her, you will have lost nothing.