All Comments on 'Jamie's Wild Adventure Ch. 02'

way too short to comment. but your story is good. keep on writing.

I love the story but it's way too short. Make it a few pages.

Definitely need longer chapters and why always at the good parts do they end... anticipation be damned!!

I would say it need a little work. This chapter was short and yes I understand but at the same time it could of been just a little bit longer. It was almost like you cut out all detail and just got straight to one point and not a detailed one either. I look forward to the next chapter and hopefully a little more detail. :)

Next chapter should be up sunday. Check my bio for updates or contact me through email :)