All Comments on 'John's Stay'

Sorry but not only was it unbelievable, it was boring. "She noticed how he was really feeling about her>"? What, she can read body language but she can't notice the difference between her future husband and his brother? Please.

had an underground swimming pool

It is always good to know a little about the subject you are including in your writing. If you are going to add high school wrestling into your story at least have a semi working knowledge of that sport.

horrible beginning, horrible middle, and horrible ending. Please delete this story so no one else has to suffer what i suffered..

Really? That sounds kind of uncomfortable, swimming with all the dirt and concrete on top of the pool. Did you mean inground swimming pool?

Great story! Why didn't you ever do a part 2? Would love see where this goes!