by dootsie
No beginning and no end and the most important thing - NO SEX!!! I don't think Erotica is your genre.
Nice little vignette, with a saucy lead character. In your next story, try to use a little less italics, although I admit they helped convey the mood in places. It was a fun read!
GOOD START TO THIS SOME WHAT SEXY STORY. NOW FOR TE NEXT PART
Loved the premise and your characters. Looking forward to the next part soon hopefully!
I like your story. I would love to read more about joce and lessa. I only found 1 error in the story but other than that i liked it. Can't wait to read more. Keep up the good job!!!