All Comments on 'Krista and her Master'

It just reads like a list of orders from master. This story is about as erotic as reading the intructions for a new toaster.

You're a good writer, but the story feels highly incomplete even for a chapter. Who was that woman and why was she there? Is she maybe Master's new live in submissive? Just so many questions here. Thank you for the story, I hope to see more writing from you.

... this was well-written, but it felt more like a scene than a story. It is always a pleasure to read a new writer's submissions and welcome to Literotica, but your story needs more than it has at present. Well done for trying - it should get a little easier from here!