by zweifelhaft
It could have been a funny story but was not told very well.
(almost) everything I can admit that I, too, on an exchange visit 12 years ago, met Jill and we had a very good time two or three afternoons.
Sorry!
I would not like to be around you, I guess I would have had nothing to laught the last 48 years.
So.....a how to lose everything you valued in one easy lesson! So, gotta wonder what he did next! Thanks, but I am left somewhat unfulfilled by the lack of closure.
Humour is a strange thing people laugh at the most strangest things. I find nothing remotely funny in finding out your married to a well heeled whore/slut.
If I did find out I would find a gun and go on a gun shooting spree. Starting with my wife. I am sure the kids would understand.
What kind of man would quietly sit through a list like that? Not my kind. Confronting a wife without doing DNA on the kids would be stupid, and asking who the other sperm donor might be would only serve to aim my anger somewhere other than at the woman who cuckolded me all over town. Hiring a lawyer who hadn't done her might also be tough. Everyone knows they screw everyone!
This was not really humor. It was non-erotic, and it was clearly inspired by HDK and others.
I didn't buy the husband's patience at the litany of infidelities, nor did I believe he wouldn't have sped back to the doctor to get himself checked for nasties.
I liked the setup, as I say clear inspired by HDK, and the ending was sort of on target. Still, it just kinda stopped without any resolution. That may have been the intent, but it didn't work real well.
Not a bad effort, but probably needed another pass (or three) through the word processor.
Although I don't mind (even enjoy) the open ended finish, I would like to know more about the wife's personality. Is she jerking his chain? Did she really spread it around? There is not enough development of her character. Thanks - this was very entertaining. Keep writing.
What kind of man who listened to the list of Parteners and not BlowUp, After being Chuchold for all those years, why not kick her to curb.
Come ON. Will not read you anymore
But whatever turns you on. I'll skip you from now on.
I enjoyed your short story and musing on what could/would happen next.
I have to believe that she really didn't cheat on him and that she was pissed off for him even thinking she would. Otherwise the story isn't believable.
Maybe if she would explain what her motives are for the spiel she give him it would take away a lot of questions.
Being that this was under Humor/Satire (and I don't think people saw that part) I thought it was a great story! Funny that the wife is nonchalantly naming all of her conquests while the husband just ponders! It's Humor people!
If the author had put it in the loving wife category I am sure that it would three time more commentaries. Of course they would be more negative and violent.... I loved the touch that when he arrived she was buttoning her blouse and that the back door was open. The marriage is dead, there is only the question of what to do about the children... I suppose he needs more lab tests but can he be confident that yes is yes and no is no after his recent experience.
Loved the satire, the tongue-in-cheek musings cracked me up.
Write more.
Btw, I'm with Anon (I know, I know, WHICH ONE, right?!): The wife sounds like a character worth exploring. She was so bizarrely cooperative, I couldn't help laughing at how surreal the conversation became.
And you ended it perfectly, right at the punchline. To go any further would've diluted the humour and turned this into something else altogether.
Good stuff!
Wonderfully thought out. Can't keep the smile off my face, and if it should disappear, I only have to read some of the uprightous comments here to set me off again.
But what if the husband caved her skull in before the doctor called? Just something else to think about.
And the matter of fact way the wife revealed her infidelity.
Yes I am sure each had a good laugh later before he shot her and before the corrective phone call and before he shot himself after killing her.<P>
Or - Just another english family tale given our hero's submissive helpless acceptance of his cockoldness but still feeling male humiliation in agreement on her right to fuck around with friends, family and anyone else through the door on 2 legs.<P>
Oh those funnishly normal english mum's eh.