by RubySxcSubSlut
Thank you for the above comments. I thought i had edited it. Does anyone know if i can edit it again now? I hope you like other stories i write.
Your use of the English language in this story is very bad. You insult the Dominant you serve, your readers, and yourself with the use of "u" and "you" interchangeably. Then you use expressions like "2 climax", "2 me", and "2 withdraw" which are truly disgusting to me as a reader. I am not from the “texting” generation and do not appreciate those shortcuts in stories. This IS NOT a forum for text message stories. You truly need an editor and should try to find one before you submit your next story here.
I was really disappointed by this story because it was excruciating to read, but the plot was interesting to me. Please don't use "u" for "you" and, really, do you think "sum" and "some" are interchangeable words because they sound alike? If so, please use the free editorial services Literotica provides, and keep writing. If not, please edit yourself and write at the level your talent deserves. I hope you will submit more, better written, work in future.