by DMaster_14
I half expected central to materialize and join them in the final orgy but it ended beautifully anyway! Thank you for this well written adventure. It has had me wanting more and more with each chapter.
I don't know how you could improve this! I was hooked from the first chapter. Should you decide to do a sequel I WILL read it! This was that enjoyable. Thank you for posting it.
Without a doubt this is one of my favourite stories that I have read on Literotica. I would so love to be in Jamie's position. As a lifelong Trekkie, and fan of slash-fic,and fan-fic in general, this story pushed the right buttons for me. I hope you continue to write more chapters, as I would love to read more adventures of a certain hot redhead. I am looking forward to reading your other works now. In the meantime I am going to re-read my introduction to the delectable Jamie Gordon.
Minus a couple of grammar errors that I saw that I mentally corrected your entire story is awesome, and I wish you would continue writing other chapters cause it is very well written.
awesome story. if it doesn't get published can you post the rest on here?
...now you're tellin me you're discontinuing the story here. Though I am glad to hear that you're trying to get the story published... hopefully they won't make you tone anything down. Good luck and please keep us posted.
Good luck on your endeavors in getting the story published. It will be our loss here, but maybe we will have the opportunity to read the commercially published version.
One thing that you need to do however. Don't rely on the spell check. You have numerous mistakes that are mostly caused by a spell check. If you sounds things out as the spelling suggestions are pointed out, you will catch just everything.
jbilove
Hope that you do get your work do by a printer and hope that you will let us all know where we will be able to buy it. Sorry note is that I wish that you were going to keep it going here.
Thanks
Power__Lineman