All Comments on 'Lunchtime Fun'

This story turned me completely on and it was amazing how Shaun could get a girl to call him master by how good he was in bed. And with the help of Dawn.

Sir, Your story has great content and detail. Shaun obviously is a Master who knows exactly what he is doing. from a slave herself it totally intriques her. she also hopes that one day she can see her Master do such to another.

I thought your story and detail was really exceptional. I would try to vary your sentence structure a little bit though - there's a lot of sentences that read

subject verb and subject verb.

with your imagination I'm sure you can do better.

:) also, quite sexy