All Comments on 'Me & Suzie's Topless Adventure'

Thank you for writing with both passion and compassion about such a sensitive yet important topic.

Ms. Gimply fears it is bad form to comment on one's own work. However some recent feedback has prompted us to speak out.

Some apparent members of the grammar police have pointed out that the title of the story is grammatically incorrect. However, Ms. Gimply does not need a lecture on on that topic. The title and several parts of the text are meant to convey that our loveable heroine, the narrator, is a bit of an airhead.

If you watch any daytime TV - Jerry Springer or any of the dreadful courtroom programs - you will find that uncertain grasp of grammar, tense and negation is rife. (My most treasured recent example is the wife who complained of her husband, "Me and him don't never go nowhere together no more.")

If our grammarians were to meet our heroine and Suzie would they spend time correcting their grammar or would they find other, more interesting ways to relate to them?

Lighten up, look around and notice what happens in the world!

Ms. G.

I'm not normally one to comment when I don't particularly like a story, but here goes.

Your story was written in a way that gave no real depth to the characters. I couldn't see where she was an air-head, nor could I see why you deleted the other comments.

She was an amputee, so what? It just sickened me to have her repeatedly mention her 'missing legs' as you called them. Just because one doesn't have legs, through no fault of their own, makes them no less sexy than the next person.

Personally, I think you played on that WAY too much and it became insulting to the reader. A constant reminder that there was something 'different' about her.

Oh, go on and delete this. You obviously can't stand truthful criticism, but I'll copy and paste this and keep reminding you until you get sick of deleting it.

We're give the option of leaving comments, because YOU allowed it. Sorry, but in short, your story should have been in the comedy section.

Ms. Gimply has never deleted a comment on any of our several stories.

We appreciate all commentary and feedback, favorable or not, and would only delete one if it explicitly violated Literotica's rules.

Ms. G.

From an initial uncertainty about what on earth it would be like (is someone taking the piss? is it going to be unbearably pathetic?), I was led to enjoy it enormously. Sexy, lively characters, and accurate depiction of their thoughts. Just enough mention of the disabilities to be realistic about what they'd feel, and correctly irrelevant when it comes to sex.

And anyone who thinks "me and X" as a subject is "ungrammatical" needs to learn a bit more about English and/or grammar and/or linguistics. Don't worry, you're correctly representing the correct grammar of English for many/most speakers.

When I read a story as good as this, unless the grammar or spelling is outrages, I'm okay with it because I'm not an English teacher grading exams, I'm reading a story that I like and little things can be overlooked or not even noticed. I enjoyed this story because it was fun and so up beat. The ladies learned to live life with the hand they were dealt and had a good time. One lucky life guard. Well done!